That's Not the Case MAG

June 22, 2012
By ololiviv GOLD, Greenwich, Connecticut
ololiviv GOLD, Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 2 photos 0 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing else fills.


There are days that
I don't think I look
like you at all,

that I look more like
Dad, that all his genes
were passed on to me.

So on those days,
I pull out that picture
where our hair is almost
the same,

and my smile is just about
as crooked,
as big,
as yours.

I hold them there,
side by side,
and for a fleeting moment,
I am my mother's daughter.

But only for a moment,
for when I put the picture down,
people can only compare me to Dad,
because he's alive.

And if I walked around with
that picture of you to show everyone,
people would just think

I was having a hard time
letting you go.



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bwriter24 said...
on Oct. 30 2012 at 4:43 pm
this was beautiful

on Oct. 26 2012 at 3:24 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

Amazing!!!!!! beautiful.... ps. will u please check out my work???? thx  

Malanie GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2012 at 7:26 am
Malanie GOLD, Blacklick, Ohio
16 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I care not what others think of what I do, but I care very much about what I think of what I do! That is character!” ~ Theodore Roosevelt

This is so beautiful.

OutKast said...
on Oct. 11 2012 at 11:12 pm
OutKast, Carrollton, Texas
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This is wonderful its very heartfelt .

Shen4 GOLD said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 6:12 am
Shen4 GOLD, Quezon City, NCR, Other
13 articles 3 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only difference between stupidity and genius; genius has its limits

i reminds me of the time i lost my younger brother, thanks for posting it

on Oct. 8 2012 at 1:44 pm
i_am_so_very_large_and_towering SILVER, Mililani, Hawaii
5 articles 1 photo 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yet what is any ocean but a multitude of drops?"

this is really really great!!!!!

on Oct. 7 2012 at 6:20 pm
Zithia PLATINUM, Cambridge, Massachusetts
27 articles 16 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It makes no difference who or what you are, old or young, black or white, pagan, Jew, or Christian, I want to love you all and be loved by you all, and I mean to have your love." -Victoria Woodhull

I appreciate the honesty in this poem.  The 3rd, 4th, 7th and 8th stanzas are particularly beautiful and actually nearly made me cry!  They are perfect.  I felt that in the 6th stanza could have been phrased better.  There might be a way of saying "because he's alive" that wouldn't break up the flow too much.  Keep in mind, that I only tell you this because the poem is so close to perfect and that I want you to push yourself so that you can make this poem the most perfect that it can be.

xxLivxx GOLD said...
on Oct. 6 2012 at 6:47 pm
xxLivxx GOLD, Preston, Other
12 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don’t walk in front of me, I may not follow. Don’t walk behind me, I may not lead. Walk beside me and be my friend.”

- Albert Camus

Beautiful work. Well done!

on Oct. 4 2012 at 2:35 am
garshongjasmine SILVER, Accra, Other
7 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
happiness resides not in possesions, and not in gold, the feeling of happiness dwells in the soul























-democritus

breath-taking  

irishlass317 said...
on Oct. 1 2012 at 7:02 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

This is so beautiful. You put so much emotion into this, and we, as readers are forced to mourn with you. This is so breathtaking and amazing. Wonderful job, and keep writing!!

on Oct. 1 2012 at 6:38 pm
pandagirl312 GOLD, Leawood, Kansas
19 articles 1 photo 92 comments
This poem has so much power and meaning. I like how it tells a story in only so many words. Great work! :)

sonJaNae said...
on Oct. 1 2012 at 3:50 pm
sonJaNae, Fort Wainwright, Alaska
0 articles 0 photos 68 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No one can change a person, but someone can be a person's reason to change" -Spongebob Squarepants

This is really good :)

Dynamo DIAMOND said...
on Jun. 29 2012 at 10:51 am
Dynamo DIAMOND, Lahore, Other
54 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
I used to think falling in love would be personal. But it's all a big public show.

That was awsum! A bit dreamy, yet still awsum!

on Jun. 29 2012 at 7:49 am
tayrobin BRONZE, Sydney, Other
2 articles 0 photos 10 comments
simple, but so beautiful. keep it up x

InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 3:40 pm
Wonderful poetry! Simple, yet nicely written with clarity. Real emotion. Powerful, moving, truthful. Beautiful writing, talented writer. Would you please comment on my work titled The Perfect Fit?

AriShine GOLD said...
on Jun. 27 2012 at 6:22 pm
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

You really drew me in. This is heartbreaking and powerful. KEEP WRITING!

on Jun. 26 2012 at 10:37 am
ClarinetPower SILVER, Macomb, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 40 comments
wow. that's all I can say at the moment, I am still processing the chilling beauty of this poem.

on Jun. 25 2012 at 9:57 pm
mindless_dreaming BRONZE, Wyckoff, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"May make my heart as a millstone, set my face as a flint, Cheat and be cheated, and die: who knows? We are ashes and we are dust." -Alfred, Lord Tennyson, 'Maud'

This is beautiful, you are a poet

Lizla BRONZE said...
on Jun. 24 2012 at 11:46 pm
Lizla BRONZE, Shelter Island, New York
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyone struggles against despair, but it always wins in the end. It has to. It's the thing that lets us say goodbye." -Jeffrey Eugenides

This is sentimental and sad at the same time. I think it's great. It's short and simple, yet clearly showcases your writing ability. Very well done! :)


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