Candles to Flames MAG

May 21, 2012
By mrittmritt77 GOLD, Ann Arbor, Michigan
mrittmritt77 GOLD, Ann Arbor, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
I will arise and go now, for always night and day

I hear lake water lapping with low sounds by the shore;

While I stand on the roadway, or on the pavements gray,


I hear it in the deep heart's core.


You think candles are
beautiful, peaceful, serene, soothing, calming

You think fire is
uncontrollable, devastating, catastrophic, disastrous

But darling, when my candle grows to a fire,
when my flames lick farther and higher,
when the torch drops to the ground
and engulfs you in the sound
of the crackling of my flames
licking farther and higher,
trap you as a pawn in my games,
and I begin to conduct the songs of my choir,

You will long, you will yearn,
for the beautiful, peaceful, serene, soothing, calming
lullaby of my candle,
the one easiest to handle,
the one harmless to the touch,
the flame that will never grow into much.



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on Jun. 10 2012 at 1:26 pm
mrittmritt77 GOLD, Ann Arbor, Michigan
15 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will arise and go now, for always night and day

I hear lake water lapping with low sounds by the shore;

While I stand on the roadway, or on the pavements gray,


I hear it in the deep heart's core.

Thanks :) I'll consider changing that up a bit, it might help :) 

on Jun. 7 2012 at 6:19 am
Eowyngreen SILVER, Metamora, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"If you don't want to be forgotten, shortly after you are dead and rotten, either do something worth writing, or write something worth reading."
~Benjamin Franklin

I like it a lot, maybe try to keep the rhyming scheme a little more consistant, for instance, sometimes it seems to be ABAB then others its AABB and sometiems it doesn't rhyme.  Other than that it was really good, and the rhyming thing is just a personal preference, whatever you like for your writing style you do!


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