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This moment is:

lying on our backs

under velvet skies

with crystal chandelier drops.
And as it passes, as it ends,
as quickly as it arrived,
I will be able to turn
To our impressed forms
And feel the heat

that radiated from our pores.
Until one day.
One day,
I will not be able to
Turn to our impressed forms.
The bent blades will leap
Back to a soldier’s attention,

millions of

straight, green spinal cords.
It will radiate a nothingness,
A loss of a moment
that can never again
be.

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haley101This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
today at 8:01 pm:
I love this. I like the here and now of it, and I feel some type of relief in your style: the uniqueness of it is intriguing. 
 
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WeAllBurn said...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 8:04 am:
interesting. I love it though (: Please read my last work, "my ship..." I believe it to be my best yet.
 
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crazychick said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 5:18 pm:

very diffrent,

 

 
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asdfghjkl;qwerty said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 11:48 am:
great job using poetic devices
 
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essbeekayy18 said...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 12:18 am:
I really loved this poem. It made me picture myself with some future love out in the grass and then picture myself again when he was gone
 
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xovanillatwilightxo This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 30, 2010 at 9:06 pm:
this is so lovely and powerful. keep it up! check out my work if you wanna:)
 
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DaylightDarkness said...
May 10, 2010 at 9:01 pm:
This is really good. It has a lot of meaning.
 
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ohh_its_manda said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 4:54 pm:
Very Very nice. Puts mine out of the copetition. Check out some of my work some time.
 
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romance_lover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 9:07 pm:
dont let anyone tell you this poem was ok. It was absolutely amazing. No exuse. You couldnt have improved it cause it was already perfect...You Should be Proud :D
 
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tweedle dee said...
Aug. 4, 2009 at 2:18 pm:
it was ok... i liked it, but i think you could have made some parts better. very pretty though!
 
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Kianayana 3 said...
Jul. 20, 2009 at 4:22 am:
Wow you are an awsome poet. I love Poetry and try to write poems all the time. that one blows all mine out of the water. it is even better than a lot of famous ones. Seriously Keep it up. Your work rocks! :P
 
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Rachel N. said...
Jul. 19, 2009 at 7:06 pm:
i thought it was beautiful. you really capture the essencce and make the reader feel as though they are a part of the magic in which your words create.
 
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despurlock This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 19, 2009 at 5:35 pm:
I love it! It's beautiful, def. worthy of published! It paints a phenomenal picture. Keep writing!
 
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Grace B. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 18, 2009 at 12:59 am:
luv it...i can really imagine whats happening
 
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SilverDawn said...
Jul. 5, 2009 at 3:59 am:
I love it lots ! esp how the last word, "be." is alone in its own line. It seems to give it all the more significance and extra force. Love it!
 
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Carlie_C. said...
Jun. 30, 2009 at 11:05 pm:
Wow!
That was great! Did you seriously write that?! Continue writting.
 
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Monica R. said...
Jun. 28, 2009 at 2:38 am:
I love this poem! I can visualize it, and it has alot of rhythm, you know? It''s awesome!
 
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Melissa K. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 2, 2009 at 3:29 pm:
KC, I absolutely adore your poetry. Your imagery is so impressive. [:
 
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PoetGenius said...
Oct. 10, 2008 at 10:49 pm:
This is a really well written piece. I love the imagery!
 
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