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Those Things That Never Were

I miss that distorted place called 'us'
On the border of my fragile trust
Disillusionment I ate up
Just like you did my reality

Your eyes bathed in a certain light
a gossamer figment, my heart's delight
But the luminescence left one night
and your shadow was cast on my soul

I miss your breath caught in me
your voice warped on a gentle breeze
But what was it you said to me?
Who knows, my love was louder

My hands cool on your lips
to silence words muting our bliss
But its for those words that I wish
and its quiet now, as I miss
Those things that never were





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youngspeare said...
Sept. 12, 2012 at 2:41 am
One word: WOW! It's seriously an amazing piece. All 5 stars for sure...
Oh and please check out my poem Ghosts of The Past and rate/comment. I would really appreciate your insight. 
Once again the poem was superb. :)
 
so_joy said...
Sept. 4, 2012 at 7:25 pm
Truly amazing. I couldn't stop reading once I've started. This poem was stuffed with emotion and honestly. I loved every second of it. Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!
 
LovelyDuckling said...
Aug. 16, 2012 at 6:49 pm
Of course! I checked out your poem "Secrets" and found its honesty refreshing. I really enjoy reading your loose flow... sometimes I tend to rely on a pattern. Great job and keep it up!
 
writer3499 said...
Aug. 15, 2012 at 2:23 am
Really good! It's sweet in a sad way...fantasic! Would you mind cecking out some of my work?
 
ema2423 said...
Aug. 1, 2012 at 7:12 pm
I thought it was good, but may I offer one piece of advice? Well, the rhyming seems forced. It would flow better if the rhyming was hmm incidental persay? As in if it didn't sound like you went and tried to find words that rhymed...anyways keep writing you have potential(:
 
jessiellis_16 said...
Jul. 30, 2012 at 3:16 pm
i loved it!
 
iCheeto This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 16, 2012 at 5:54 pm
This was so great, I loved it all.  Would you look at some of my work and tell me what you think?  Keep writing like this, you'll go far :)
 
AugustusH20s said...
Jun. 16, 2012 at 2:40 pm
So good. Keep writing! xBri
 
VballGirl143 said...
Jun. 4, 2012 at 5:50 pm
This is amazing! :)
 
bribre said...
Jun. 4, 2012 at 8:28 am
there are poems that make you wnat to read them over and over! great work:)
 
Meghan D. said...
Jun. 2, 2012 at 8:18 pm
Beautiful. Well writen! Email me if you wright more poems :D
 
surya said...
May 27, 2012 at 5:01 am

nice one yaar...

these lines were simply cool,"But what was it you said to me?
Who knows, my love was louder"

 

but c'mon wake up..

thoes things that never were,keep your eyes open you might get those soon enough...

 
Magaly said...
May 25, 2012 at 7:27 pm

"But what was it you said to me?
Who knows, my love was louder."

 

That's my favorite line, this is a great poem by the way!

 
Aduke9 said...
May 25, 2012 at 6:53 pm
That was an amazing poem!
 
JackieH said...
May 25, 2012 at 5:33 pm
Fantastic! Thanks for reccomending it.
 
bandgeek2011 said...
May 25, 2012 at 4:20 pm
Great poem, I hope you keep writing because this was amazing. :)
 
withloveXDThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 25, 2012 at 9:43 am
i love it! omg your amazing! keep writing, never give up this gift!
 
Violabookworm said...
May 24, 2012 at 10:08 am
This is really good! :) I love your wording and descriptions. I think it's beautiful. Thanks for asking me to read it. I really enjoyed it. :))
 
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May 23, 2012 at 4:34 pm
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