Those Things That Never Were

May 4, 2012
By LovelyDuckling GOLD, Hamilton, Montana
LovelyDuckling GOLD, Hamilton, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
A vision without action is a hallucination.


I miss that distorted place called 'us'
On the border of my fragile trust
Disillusionment I ate up
Just like you did my reality

Your eyes bathed in a certain light
a gossamer figment, my heart's delight
But the luminescence left one night
and your shadow was cast on my soul

I miss your breath caught in me
your voice warped on a gentle breeze
But what was it you said to me?
Who knows, my love was louder

My hands cool on your lips
to silence words muting our bliss
But its for those words that I wish
and its quiet now, as I miss
Those things that never were



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on Sep. 12 2012 at 2:41 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

One word: WOW! It's seriously an amazing piece. All 5 stars for sure...
Oh and please check out my poem Ghosts of The Past and rate/comment. I would really appreciate your insight. 
Once again the poem was superb. :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 4 2012 at 7:25 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Truly amazing. I couldn't stop reading once I've started. This poem was stuffed with emotion and honestly. I loved every second of it. Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!

on Aug. 16 2012 at 6:49 pm
LovelyDuckling GOLD, Hamilton, Montana
16 articles 0 photos 125 comments

Favorite Quote:
A vision without action is a hallucination.

Of course! I checked out your poem "Secrets" and found its honesty refreshing. I really enjoy reading your loose flow... sometimes I tend to rely on a pattern. Great job and keep it up!

on Aug. 15 2012 at 2:23 am
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."
-J.K.Rowling

Really good! It's sweet in a sad way...fantasic! Would you mind cecking out some of my work?

EmilyGrau GOLD said...
on Aug. 1 2012 at 7:12 pm
EmilyGrau GOLD, Jackson, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
We all have these things, that no one can see. They hold us down like anchors, they drown us out at sea.

I thought it was good, but may I offer one piece of advice? Well, the rhyming seems forced. It would flow better if the rhyming was hmm incidental persay? As in if it didn't sound like you went and tried to find words that rhymed...anyways keep writing you have potential(:

on Jul. 30 2012 at 3:16 pm
jessiellis_16 BRONZE, Grovetown, Georgia
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i loved it!

on Jun. 16 2012 at 5:54 pm
iCheeto PLATINUM, Cape Coral, Florida
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This was so great, I loved it all.  Would you look at some of my work and tell me what you think?  Keep writing like this, you'll go far :)

AugustusH20s said...
on Jun. 16 2012 at 2:40 pm
AugustusH20s, Thousand Oaks, California
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So good. Keep writing! xBri

on Jun. 4 2012 at 5:50 pm
oopsididitagain, Why, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
i go though life like a karate kid

This is amazing! :)

bribre BRONZE said...
on Jun. 4 2012 at 8:28 am
bribre BRONZE, Marathon, New York
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Favorite Quote:
I may look small and weak but acyually im stronger than u think by me

there are poems that make you wnat to read them over and over! great work:)

Megzzie SILVER said...
on Jun. 2 2012 at 8:18 pm
Megzzie SILVER, Auburn, Maine
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Beautiful. Well writen! Email me if you wright more poems :D

surya said...
on May. 27 2012 at 5:01 am
surya, Rajapalayam,Tamil Nadu, Other
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Favorite Quote:
The woods are lovely dark and deep but I have promises to keep..
And miles to go before I sleep and miles to go before I sleep..

nice one yaar...

these lines were simply cool,"But what was it you said to me?
Who knows, my love was louder"

 

but c'mon wake up..

thoes things that never were,keep your eyes open you might get those soon enough...


Magaly BRONZE said...
on May. 25 2012 at 7:27 pm
Magaly BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
You can't get over it, you have to get through it.

"But what was it you said to me?
Who knows, my love was louder."

 

That's my favorite line, this is a great poem by the way!


bluhs said...
on May. 25 2012 at 6:53 pm
bluhs, E, Alabama
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That was an amazing poem!

on May. 25 2012 at 5:33 pm
JackieH PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Don't break character, you've got a lot of heart. ~ The Killers

Fantastic! Thanks for reccomending it.

on May. 25 2012 at 4:20 pm
bandgeekfreak DIAMOND, No Answer, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
“A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write, if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself.” Abraham Maslow.

Great poem, I hope you keep writing because this was amazing. :)

on May. 25 2012 at 9:43 am
winny_addams PLATINUM, Apple Valley, Minnesota
47 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is found within, don't judge from beauty outside judge the beauty inside

i love it! omg your amazing! keep writing, never give up this gift!

on May. 24 2012 at 10:08 am
Violabookworm BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Do or do not, there is no try" - Yoda

This is really good! :) I love your wording and descriptions. I think it's beautiful. Thanks for asking me to read it. I really enjoyed it. :))

on May. 23 2012 at 4:34 pm
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
"Nobody can go back and make a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending." -Maria Robinson

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on May. 23 2012 at 4:34 pm
meganwagner21 PLATINUM, Old Bridge, New Jersey
42 articles 0 photos 139 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes good things have to fall apart so better things can fall together." -Marilyn Monroe
"Nobody can go back and make a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending." -Maria Robinson

Please keep your comments positive and constructive. We'll remove anything inappropriate. Thanks!


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