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The wild wind blew,
The leaves rustled restlessly
As they impatiently waited
For that time of the year
When the heavens gifted
The earth with
Precious little pearls.

The sun flowers feared
What was to come,
While the peacocks opened out
Their beautiful blue-green feathers
And danced, ever so gracefully,
In the monsoon’s welcome.

The ants hurriedly collected
Food and rushed to their colonies,
For the cold they could not bear
And dragonflies swam about the skies
Waiting to hear,
The pitter-patter
Of the drumming drizzles;
Waiting to see,
The divine rains
Bless the solemn soil;
Waiting to feel,
The touch of the
Pure crystals.

All the movement stopped
And the forest froze.
Every year was listening
To the laughter of clouds
Playfully into each other
And every gaze was fixed
On Zeus’ mighty strikes.

Through tear-filled eyes
Every single creature watched
The first drop of the sacred showers
Passionately kiss the ground.



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TheCapturedBatThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 15, 2012 at 2:56 pm:
Beautiful imagery! I especially love the last line.
 
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Ashleyann27 said...
May 23, 2012 at 12:15 pm:
I like the images and word choices that you used. If I had to give a criticism it would be that the flow is off in some spots. A poem should be able to flow continuosly. Unless you were trying to create a sort of choppy effect in those areas. I did like it though! :)
 
Josika.Nav replied...
May 23, 2012 at 9:35 pm :
i was actually trying to create a choppy flow for that rain effect but thank you for your feedback :D
 
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Pigwidgeon said...
Apr. 22, 2012 at 5:00 am:
great, josika! loved it :)
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 23, 2012 at 8:07 am :
thank you pigwidgeon :)
 
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Taconut7This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 3:18 pm:
I liked how I could picture the suspence in my mind!
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 21, 2012 at 7:48 am :
thank you ! XD
 
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bearsfan654 said...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 10:34 pm:
I loved the description! However, I felt the rhythm was off. But overall it's a very good poem!
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 21, 2012 at 7:47 am :
 i actually wanted it to be a little choppy  but thank you ! XD
 
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beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 11:36 am:
I like how this poem is focused on the animals---because the animals always know before humans went natural disasters will happen. Then there's that moment when all is silent, movement ceased, the air charged with energy...then it happens. This all ran through my mind when reading your poem. The last stanza was the best for me.
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 11:41 am :
thank you so much beautifulspirit XD i commented on "Waiting for inspiration". i really enjoyed it :)
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 11:43 am :
Oh that was fast! Thanks~
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 11:46 am :
no problem! :D
 
jackiee129 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 11, 2012 at 10:33 pm :
I love the way you personified all of the individual animals and the way you turned an ordinary event into something wonderful and anticipated. 
 
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