Axtell

March 21, 2012
By , Hollywood, CA
He peeks up at me, smiling
The first time I have the courage, observing
His hair blown across his forehead, swishing
The thick red lips, beckoning

I look into his changing eyes
Piercing blue yet soft and gentle
Determined yet kind and loving
Searching you yet glistening too

I smiled back, cherishing
He spoke, I felt scared yet anxious
For he wasn’t speaking to my mind
But looking into my soul





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Darbs1325 said...
May 21, 2012 at 6:40 pm
Bravo! keep up the work... :D
 
eeoopig said...
May 20, 2012 at 12:27 am
good. it was descriptive, but short. I loved it though! :)
 
jocy80 said...
May 19, 2012 at 3:26 pm
this was good but u could add more make them longer with more feeling how that moment was try describing more but thats just wat i think
 
Em0-KaNaMe said...
May 19, 2012 at 11:00 am
wow.this is very good kylah.keeep itt up.write more!!!i loved itt but wht confused me a lil bitt was the thick red lips part.do guys have red lips??
 
compassion said...
May 19, 2012 at 10:13 am

i first imagined a mom holiding a baby in the first lines lol .love it :)

 

 
Tesia said...
May 19, 2012 at 1:27 am
I love it! So much imagery! You are very talented.. :)
 
Kylah replied...
May 19, 2012 at 9:38 am
Thanks so much! <3
 
Bookeater said...
May 18, 2012 at 11:45 pm
nice, you do good free-verse. Try making them longer if you can though, that would be nice
 
Jordan C. said...
Apr. 10, 2012 at 10:37 pm
Its really good! I liked the beat you had in the first stanza!
 
SweetSandyFlower replied...
Apr. 21, 2012 at 12:59 pm
Super cute! Good job.
 
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