March 21, 2012
By Anonymous

He peeks up at me, smiling
The first time I have the courage, observing
His hair blown across his forehead, swishing
The thick red lips, beckoning

I look into his changing eyes
Piercing blue yet soft and gentle
Determined yet kind and loving
Searching you yet glistening too

I smiled back, cherishing
He spoke, I felt scared yet anxious
For he wasn’t speaking to my mind
But looking into my soul

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Darbs1325 GOLD said...
on May. 21 2012 at 6:40 pm
Darbs1325 GOLD, Columbus, Georgia
15 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a reflection of reflects love....hate reflects hate....-Jonathan Lockwood Huie

When the world puts you down, keep your head up!-Anonymous?

Bravo! keep up the work... :D

eeoopig said...
on May. 20 2012 at 12:27 am
good. it was descriptive, but short. I loved it though! :)

jocy80 SILVER said...
on May. 19 2012 at 3:26 pm
jocy80 SILVER, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
better to write for yourself and have no public, thanto write for the public and have no self. Cyril Connolly

this was good but u could add more make them longer with more feeling how that moment was try describing more but thats just wat i think

Em0-KaNaMe said...
on May. 19 2012 at 11:00 am
wow.this is very good kylah.keeep itt up.write more!!!i loved itt but wht confused me a lil bitt was the thick red lips guys have red lips??

on May. 19 2012 at 10:13 am
compassion GOLD, Nowhere, Other
12 articles 17 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
Expect to have hope rekindled,expect your prayers to be answered in wondrous ways! The dry seasons in life do not last,the spring rains will come again.

i first imagined a mom holiding a baby in the first lines lol .love it :)


Saphy BRONZE said...
on May. 19 2012 at 9:38 am
Saphy BRONZE, Hollywood, California
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never forget to smile.

Thanks so much! <3

on May. 19 2012 at 1:27 am
TesiaLeigh BRONZE, Princeton, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
If you give up now, you'll give up later. If you give up later, what are you teaching the little ones who look up to you? Think about it... Push forward. Be proud of who you are! You are special. Never forget that!

I love it! So much imagery! You are very talented.. :)

on May. 18 2012 at 11:45 pm
Bookeater BRONZE, Louisville, Kentucky
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we are all mad here"~ Cheshire cat:"

nice, you do good free-verse. Try making them longer if you can though, that would be nice

on Apr. 21 2012 at 12:59 pm
SweetSandyFlower GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
14 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
Not everyone has to go to college because ..hello!.. PIZZAS DONT DELIVER THEMSELVES!!!!

Super cute! Good job.

on Apr. 10 2012 at 10:37 pm
Jordan Criswell BRONZE, West Sacramento, California
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Its really good! I liked the beat you had in the first stanza!


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