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It took twenty one hours
For a small seed
To sprout.

It took several days
For that small sprout to grow
Into a sweet sapling.

It took numerous months
For that sweet sapling to
Evolve in to a great tree.

For countless years
Did that great tree
Embrace the rejected rabbits.

For countless years
Did she nourish
The baby butterflies.

For countless years
Did she speak for
The silent sparrows.

For countless years
She protected
Her forest folk
And like a mother
She did love them all.

Then came one man
And in one afternoon
Did he wipe out
Her entire existence.



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beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 10:56 am:
It kinda felt like this had underlying tones of men vs. women. I like the way this tree was protrayed---a nurturer, pacient being, like a woman. One who stood up for others and to offer a helping hand. The animals made a sweet presence too. 
 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 14, 2012 at 9:39 am :
thank you XD!
 
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JoPepperThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 8, 2012 at 12:24 pm:

That was fantastic, it sort of reminds me of that saying

 

"It takes twenty years to build a reputation, and twenty minutes to ruin it."

Great job keep writing!!!

 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 9, 2012 at 12:06 am :
thank you so much! XD
 
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Midnight_StarsongThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 7:13 am:
I love it. Keep writing
 
JosikaNav replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 7:17 am :
thank you so much!
 
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poetidea_myworld_22 said...
Mar. 20, 2012 at 12:03 pm:
i loved it :) <3
 
JosikaNav replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 6:11 am :
thank you poet! :)
 
loveissmiles replied...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 9:20 am :

i really like this piece, and it shows a lot of talent! I especially loved the repeated phrase "For countless years" i really allowed the reader to imagine an old strong tree.

 

But just as some helpful feedback, i felt that the last stanza was a little rough, and had a abrupt ending. I wasn't sure if this was what you were going for or not, but all in all i really like this. "If you could comment on "My Mommy Is MIA" that would be great!

 
Josika.Nav replied...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 9:50 am :
i was going for that sort of an ending. sure, i would love to check out your poem and give my feedback  XD
 
AthenaMarisaDeterminedbyFateThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 21, 2012 at 9:05 am :
Man, that's such a sad poem, but it's really incredible! It invokes an emotional reaction from its readers, and that is what the best poems do. Great work :)
 
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