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Overcome

When I hear the songs about the
Bluebirds flying about
Over the rainbow
In the great big sky

A series of feelings
Stream from my heart
It’s my life story told
In a lullaby

Raised in shambles
As I grew up
My family broke down
Walking past the mansions of my dreams
With their prosperous owners walking
So elegantly, so perfectly


It was all I could do

To not think of them as gods

The invisible border of my home city
Drew a thin line between you and me
You, with your satin, diamonds and rubies
I, with my ripped filth they call clothes

I, an earthling

You, a bluebird
Your impressive education
And wealthy lineage
Gets you all you want in life

While my unlucky circumstances
And my pathetic life
Was nothing but obstacles I have yet to
Overcome

Why do I have to be an earthling?
To stay on the ground and miss out on life?

Why can’t I fly the winds like you?



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bloodroselove said...
Mar. 2, 2012 at 7:05 pm:
i love the imagery and emotion from this poem. it truly explains what its like to be in someones shadow and look up to them and the world they have. very nice job! keep up the writing!
 
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Donahue8 said...
Feb. 27, 2012 at 7:05 pm:
great work! I loved the imagery!
 
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IamtheshyStargirl said...
Feb. 27, 2012 at 6:56 pm:

Lovely, your flow is really good, and your imagery and metaphor are superb :D

However, I didn't really like the repetetive 'abouts' in the first paragraph, and there was some iffy grammar in the third paragraph from the bottom.

All in all, I really liked this, and I am very glad your shared it on here :) Keep up the good work, I hope I have been encouraging and of some help.

 
I.White replied...
Feb. 27, 2012 at 9:31 pm :
wow- i didn't even notice the about thing until you pointed it out
 
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MissShah said...
Feb. 26, 2012 at 9:23 pm:

good job.. i like it..=}

 

 
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Nick-M said...
Feb. 26, 2012 at 9:16 pm:
Wow, this was really nice. I enjoyed it. :)
 
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Swims.M.V. said...
Feb. 24, 2012 at 8:05 pm:
The human version of Lady and the Tramp <3 LOVE IT!
 
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CaliGirl20 said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 10:54 pm:
LOVE your poem! I think its completely wonderful... it's very discriptive! Keep writing your pretty good.
 
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Abbeth said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 10:39 pm:
it's really good! i like the mataphors and symbolism. your word choice too
 
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J-punzle27This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 7:10 pm:
Wow, real hard core man.... That touched me here in the heart..
 
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LilRed235 said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 7:08 pm:
Wow! This is great!! I love the figurative language!
 
I.White replied...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 7:17 pm :
thank you- I used one of my favorite songs are a metaphor for life
 
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holyblondecheerleaderbatman said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 7:06 pm:
LOVE IT 
 
starbucks_queen21 replied...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 9:21 pm :
aww, this was sooo good! :) Awesome job!!!! <3
 
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I.White said...
Feb. 23, 2012 at 6:52 pm:

Please comment and rate this poem!!!!

Thank you!

 
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