Doll House

January 28, 2012
By JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears


There they are with their porcelain faces
Beauty, perfection, pretending to be
Full lips and big eyes, no insecurity
So much better they are, than me


They sit on their little plastic chairs
And wear beautiful, gossamer gowns
Hollow heads and empty brains
And nothing, by them, will be found


With their hourglass curves and their
Sweetly betraying, innocent voices
They are forever the lovely ones
Nature frees them from making choices


And on their plastic table, in front of them
Is a shiny, bright silver platter
Because they're entitled, it's handed to them
And all else ceases to matter


And society encourages them
Set their faces on glossed over pages
And I tear myself up, meek as a mouse


I guess we're all subject to the doll house



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on May. 5 2013 at 7:04 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Amazing images! I loved the lines "Full lips and big eyes, no insecurity. So much better than me." Every teen can relate to that part of the poem. I loved it!

on Apr. 28 2013 at 10:27 pm
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

This is a great poem!  The imagery is awesome... I think because your choice of words is unique.  I love the overall idea of the "doll house" and I especially love their "sweetly betraying, innocent voices."  That line just gives me chills; it's great!

on Apr. 28 2013 at 8:49 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Wow great job. I love the imagry and all of the meatphors and just everything. Perfect.

on Apr. 28 2013 at 8:45 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hello there. You have a lot of talent as it so clearly shows in this poem. Free verse poems are all so unqiue and  the beauty in the work is the writer. I love the title, it's very mysterious. It has open perspective for the reader. I really, really liked the picture you chose to go with this! The rhymes are solid, good job on that. I like your word choices, 'porcelain', 'insecurity', 'gossamer', 'innocent', 'entitled', 'society'. Those are all very good, they tied this together very well! I think that the third stanza is the best, my favorite. I love this, the ending is spicy! Great job!

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on Sep. 9 2012 at 1:20 pm
AsIAm PLATINUM, Somewhere, North Carolina
48 articles 3 photos 608 comments

Favorite Quote:
"According to some, heroic deaths are admirable things. (Generally those who don't have to do it. Politicians and writers spring to mind.) I've never been convinced by this argument, mainly because, no matter how cool, stylish, composed, unflappable, manly, or defiant you are, at the end of the day you're also dead. Which is a little too permanent for my liking." — Jonathan Stroud (Ptolemy's Gate)

This is fantastic. Literally no criticisms. I love the imagery, the idea, the language, the way you said it... stellar work.

on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:37 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Thank you! And although it says, "And nothing, by them, will be found", I understand what you mean.

on Feb. 13 2012 at 3:35 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Thank you! (: What would you suggest I work on?

on Feb. 13 2012 at 2:10 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Refreshing use of rhyme here! Especially how you put a couplet at the end, which expresses finality well. I feel that "meek as a mouse" was a little cliche, and the "nothing, by them to be found" to feel a little forced, but I like the subject and I think you addressed it well.

on Feb. 13 2012 at 1:54 am
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
16 articles 16 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

Great job! The imagery was great, the message spot on, and the wording was perfect (although I would work on some of the punctuation)!

on Feb. 12 2012 at 6:51 pm
dreamsandthings SILVER, San Diego, California
5 articles 1 photo 3 comments
Amazing language and word choice!

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:14 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

THANK YOU!

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:13 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Thank you! (:

on Feb. 10 2012 at 11:29 am
softballbabe2014 SILVER, Wimberley, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Smile now, Cry later." "everything happens for a reason"

(: I absolutely love it and agree!

on Feb. 10 2012 at 8:48 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 348 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

I love this! You done an outstanding job!:) I love the way you worded it too! Keep up the great work!!

on Feb. 8 2012 at 1:46 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Thank you!!

on Feb. 8 2012 at 1:46 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Thank you so much! (:

on Feb. 8 2012 at 1:45 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Thank you! (:

on Feb. 5 2012 at 7:25 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1401 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

I like the point addressed with this poem, especially the last line. You made the dolls seem like sirens or bewitching beings or something. The word choice was inspiring also~ 5/5 from me!

BluBliss GOLD said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 4:01 pm
BluBliss GOLD, New York, New York
14 articles 0 photos 161 comments

Favorite Quote:
Bella's love for Edward was like, "Omg. He's hot. He's mine because he sparkles. Now I'll brood the wholle book while I'm with him."

I love the tone of this poem. I especially enjoyed the lines "i tear myself up, meek as a mouse/ i guess we're all subject to the dollhouse." and "nature frees them from making choices." And with the silver-platter pointout, that was nice. good job.

on Feb. 4 2012 at 10:51 am
J-Poetry-R SILVER, Enterprise, Alabama
6 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My greatest writings are on the pages of life"
- J-Poetry-R

really like the point and the style used, word choice great. An all round good poem. Let me know of any more work to check out


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