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Death keeps me away,
From loving you everyday,
I count the times,
I wish to reach out,
And turn your sad pout,
Into a foolish smile,
Then I remember,
Love is dead to me,
Cold like December,
Snow that falls lifelessly,
My heart is black,
Just like the moonless night,
There is no light,
I'm dead,
Love is nothing.



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truthlovehurts said...
Jan. 26, 2012 at 10:10 am
Amazing I LOVED IT HAHA :)
 
Ravenfall1020 replied...
Jan. 26, 2012 at 11:48 am
thanks ^w^ really appreciated it even tho u read it at school lol
 
SilverSun said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 9:06 pm
Really sad but really beautiful. Nice writing
 
Ravenfall1020 replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 9:11 pm
thanks lots :)
 
WrittenEmotions said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:31 pm
This is really awesome, simple yet extremely thought provoking in it's own way, I really enjoyed this piece^^
 
Ravenfall1020 replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:40 pm
thankies lots ^^
 
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 5:51 pm
Clever rhyming! I love it :)
 
Ravenfall1020 replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:13 pm
thankses so much ^w^
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:42 pm
Oh, you're welcome!! ^*^
 
pointblank said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 5:45 pm
It is pretty good, but I think you can make "Love is dead to me stronger" more powerful it lacks the volume the other lines have- it is just to improve, I am not trying to diss you but help you
 
Ravenfall1020 replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:13 pm
thanks, im not sure how i could make it any better really but ill keep tht in mind if i ever re-do it ^^
 
Firetip This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 5:43 pm
Wow. That's powerfully....sad. :( But really good! Keep up the great work!
 
Ravenfall1020 replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:12 pm
thanks, its sorta meant to be sad so i guess i succeeded ^^
 
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