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Snow Grotesques

Formed from nature’s elements
the battle of warmth and cold
heaps of white powder,
sugar grains lumped together.
Slowly eroded
by snow, rain, cars
new forms emerge
as snow grotesques.



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AdrienneMPayneThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 8, 2012 at 11:28 am:
Wow, I love the contrasts here...  You take something simple...  The process of falling and melting snow... and you turn it into something interesting, reflective, and elegant.  That is the gift a writer.  I like this...  Alot.  Excelent.
 
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yesterday.today.forever said...
Mar. 12, 2012 at 5:32 pm:
this is amazingly pretty!! its different from what i usually read, i like it a lot!!!
 
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snaomi This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:17 pm:
I really like the "battle of warmth and cold" theme - I think it would be interesting if the battle theme permeated the rest of the poem - for example, if "lumped" were a more active, violent world. I like the last line a lot. I almost want more - a longer description of the why they are so "grotesque" - nice start though :)
 
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