Thoughts

Stolen away,
Beating... Beating...
Taking a breath,
Denial weeps for us.
Against my skin...
Hidden inside,
Are we really nothing?

Softly this heart longs...
For you...
What lies in your eyes?
Oh, my love...
Remember who I am,
So gently falling...
Captured.

Whisper again,
Are all your secrets screaming?
Begging...
Turn around,
Face the fear of Passion!
Silent...

Is it love that you're thinking of when we are quiet?
Falling...
Silent...
Again.





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TheGirlWhoReachesForStars said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 9:45 am
Okay this one literally almost brought tears to my eyes... it's fantastic :)
 
torilutz8 said...
Mar. 27, 2012 at 8:30 pm
I love the dramatic feel your writing style has... it's really intense and addictive :)
 
DifferentTeen said...
Mar. 10, 2012 at 12:35 pm
Oh my, this is amazing! I can personally relate more to this poem. I've always held the belief that silence contains the secrets in life. I feel like this poem when I'm with my best friend on the bus, we talk for a while but then he kind of abruptly stops and just remains silent as he stares out the window listening to his music. I always wonder what hes thinking. And I think you put it into words, thank you!
 
EthanCalhoun said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 8:29 am
Face the fear of Passion! 5/5
 
Wonderment said...
Jan. 31, 2012 at 8:21 pm
Wow. It littearly haunts me. I love your use of epithets. Wonderful. 5/5 stars and thsi one is going in my favs too.
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 3:07 pm
oooo i like this one! =) my favorite lines are "Whisper again, / Are all your secrets screaming?" and "Is it love that you're thinking of when we are quiet?" very good job, i think i'm putting this one on my favorites! 5/5
 
chloe_garrett said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 1:16 pm
I really like the stanza that says "Softly this heart longs... For you... What lies in your eyes? Oh, my love... Remember who I am, So gently falling... Captured." You just write so beautifully. Definitely 5/5
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 2:45 pm
Thank you so much, Chloe ^^ You are so sweet and I love your comments^^
 
Blue4indigo said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 10:58 am
This is my favorite of yours, so far! You say so much with so little words... its beautiful!
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 11:03 am
Thanks so much! ^^ this one didn't seen so good to me at first, but I guess it is! (:
 
ErinMM said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 7:31 pm
this is realy good, like it.
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 7:48 pm
Thanks(: so much
 
Silver2black said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 5:35 am
"Falling... Silent... Again. " Beautiful, It's nice sad, questionable, and I like the graceful style !
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 2:24 pm
thamks so much! I appreciate that my work is appreciated ^^
 
Luna3952 said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 6:30 pm
Filled with passion!!!! AMAZING!!!! LOVE IT!!!!
 
InvisibleHeart said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 7:30 pm
This is so good. I feel like I am actually in a situation and this is happening to me! Love it 5/5 golden stars for you!
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 7:34 pm
Thanks so much^^
 
JerseyGirl716 said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 6:14 pm
WOW. JUST WOW. 5/5, awesome job!
 
Emma-Riley said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 2:44 pm
good job! (: super awesome luv it
 
WrittenEmotions said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 7:35 pm
Thank you(: it's a sad thing to cope with, but writing helps me.
 
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