"These Lights"

January 4, 2012
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They can't see
And they don't know
What they're doing to me
In this place that I know

I roamed the street
With my heart on my sleeve
Right where ends meet
But they won't believe me

The rain starts to pour
As I look througt their eyes
But all I want is more
And i see through their eyes

I hear their laughs
And I hear their cries
As I walk down the cold path
And I listen to their lies

I want to tell them
I've tried over and over again
But to them I'm not a jem
And it happens all over again

I watch their happieness
And wonder how they could be happy
When these lights make them see even less
Oh the irony





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brokedownandlonely said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 7:14 pm
keep it up
 
NightGoddess17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 3:09 pm
i really like this, but one item of criticism. It's really not the best idea to rhyme using the same word. It gets a little redundant... unless you're repeating a phrase... other than that, i love the poem!! great job and keep writing!! :)
 
haley854 replied...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 3:10 pm
i think when i wrote this i was pushing to emphasize some of those statements more maybee by repeating them. hahah who knows? thanks for the advice though!!
 
haley854 said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 2:25 pm
Thanks! and will do!
 
Emilyourstruly said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 11:29 pm
that was really amazing! great job! P.S. you should check out my poem its called "New Me"!
 
haley854 said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 6:22 pm
That means a lot! thanks soo much!
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 6:19 pm
it's beautiful! you're a great writer
 
girlwithpower18 said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 12:19 pm
This was really good! very strong writer
 
haley854 replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 3:45 pm
Thank you!
 
DreamyJess said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 10:26 am
Very well written!
 
haley854 replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 3:45 pm
Thanks you!
 
haley854 said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 8:52 pm
Thank you both!
 
SeizeTheDay said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 8:45 pm
Wow!!! Just.. Wow! That was really beautiful! Keep up the awesome work! :)
 
redhead2 said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 8:45 pm
Bravo seniora! loves it!
 
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