"These Lights"

January 4, 2012
By haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown


They can't see
And they don't know
What they're doing to me
In this place that I know

I roamed the street
With my heart on my sleeve
Right where ends meet
But they won't believe me

The rain starts to pour
As I look througt their eyes
But all I want is more
And i see through their eyes

I hear their laughs
And I hear their cries
As I walk down the cold path
And I listen to their lies

I want to tell them
I've tried over and over again
But to them I'm not a jem
And it happens all over again

I watch their happieness
And wonder how they could be happy
When these lights make them see even less
Oh the irony


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schristensen said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 7:14 pm
schristensen, Coden, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
be you not your neighbor

keep it up

haley854 GOLD said...
on Jan. 9 2012 at 3:10 pm
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown

i think when i wrote this i was pushing to emphasize some of those statements more maybee by repeating them. hahah who knows? thanks for the advice though!!

on Jan. 9 2012 at 3:09 pm
NightGoddess17 PLATINUM, New City, New York
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i really like this, but one item of criticism. It's really not the best idea to rhyme using the same word. It gets a little redundant... unless you're repeating a phrase... other than that, i love the poem!! great job and keep writing!! :)

haley854 GOLD said...
on Jan. 9 2012 at 2:25 pm
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown

Thanks! and will do!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 11:29 pm
Emilyourstruly BRONZE, Spring Grove, Minnesota
4 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

that was really amazing! great job! P.S. you should check out my poem its called "New Me"!

haley854 GOLD said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 6:22 pm
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown

That means a lot! thanks soo much!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 6:19 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

it's beautiful! you're a great writer

haley854 GOLD said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 3:45 pm
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown

Thanks you!

haley854 GOLD said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 3:45 pm
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown

Thank you!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 12:19 pm
girlwithpower18 SILVER, Willard, Ohio
6 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty, madness is genius and it's better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring."
-Marilyn Monroe

This was really good! very strong writer

JLeigh BRONZE said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:26 am
JLeigh BRONZE, Bloemfontein, Other
4 articles 2 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dynamites come in small packages.

Very well written!

haley854 GOLD said...
on Jan. 7 2012 at 8:52 pm
haley854 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Who are you to judge me. im not perfect and i dont claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your own hands are clean."-unknown

Thank you both!

on Jan. 7 2012 at 8:45 pm
SeizeTheDay SILVER, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
7 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem (Seize the day).

Wow!!! Just.. Wow! That was really beautiful! Keep up the awesome work! :)

on Jan. 7 2012 at 8:45 pm
redheadeddevil2 GOLD, Mabelvale, Arkansas
10 articles 18 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"be yourself"

Bravo seniora! loves it!


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