Reaching for Breath

January 2, 2012
By WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...


Drowning in a sea of familiarity,
I touch the face of the One I've ignored for too long...
Beauty creeping into my searching eyes,
Broken,
Falling,
And seeking an answer...
When will hate burn?
Don't pretend you aren't in pain...
So many lies robbing you of passion,
Won't you stand?
Fight for all the lost innocence?
So sick,
Defenseless...
Flames dance brightly,
A seduction unknown...
Your heart lost in a fantasy,
Such make-believe intimacy,
Didn't you realize the lie all along?
Begging for one last night,
Loving every softly whispered deception...
Enough!
Forgotten words wait to steal all of you,
Breathing lust slowly down your neck,
Hidden behind beautiful features...
Intoxication so deadly...
Escape out of grasp,
Night becomes your Lover...
Impossible to resist,
In love,
Reaching for Breath...
And gone. ~


The author's comments:
This is really up to interpretation. I don't really know what I was thinking when I wrote it. But I hope it connects with you all in a certain way as it has me.

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on Jan. 19 2012 at 6:37 pm
Luna3952 SILVER, Lynchburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
All is fair in love and war.
Palsm 114
John 3:17

this is just amazing... im wowed

on Jan. 16 2012 at 7:15 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks so much! I wasn't so sure about posting this one.

on Jan. 16 2012 at 7:06 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

I couldn't agree more, AWESOME JOB! 5/5!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 5:50 pm
alex_gold SILVER, Southlake, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
'You can approach the act of writing with nervousness, excitement, hopefulness, or even despair - the sense that you can never completely put on the page what's in your mind and heart. You can come to the act with your fists clenched and your eyes narrowed, ready to kick ass and take down names. You can come to it because you want a girl to marry you or because you want to change the world. Come to it any way but lightly. Let me say it again: you must not come lightly to the blank page.'

Stephen King

That was mind boggling good!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 3:29 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

I agree with jazz You have a very good writing style and its so unique but great!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 2:51 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks! ^^

jazz. said...
on Jan. 14 2012 at 12:03 pm
this is great so deep and i love your writing style

on Jan. 13 2012 at 8:06 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you so much!(: I didn't think this one was any good.. I guess alot of pain is in this... But you were spot on on the interpretation!

on Jan. 13 2012 at 7:56 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

The pain of moving on and seeing the other person act like nothings wrong; like nothing was shared. He left on bad terms didn't he? What I really get out of this is that deception is sometimes a two way streak. Even if both parties don't intentionally deceive. I could elaborate deeper.. But I don't think I shall. Once again you don't fail to dissapoint, in my opinion this is one of the best I've read.

on Jan. 13 2012 at 2:59 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

To me this i see it as you being and loving someone you don't want too, instead you want to feel a burning hate for them instead, but that's not the way it is. I really love it you are an amazing writer. i love the pic as well.

Fizza SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:30 am
Fizza SILVER, Raipur, Other
8 articles 2 photos 177 comments
very nice work. keep writing. 5/5 stars. :) :)

cookiestar said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:29 am
Wow, this is beautiful and well written:). Good job!

on Jan. 9 2012 at 10:10 pm
Fabala_G BRONZE, Broomfield, Colorado
1 article 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Try to learn to breathe deeply,
really to taste food when you eat,
and when you sleep, really to sleep.
Try as much as possible to be
wholly alive, with all your might,
and when you laugh, laugh like hell,
and when you get angry, get good
and angry. Try to be alive. You will
be dead soon enough."
William Saroyan

That was really beautiful :) 5/5.

on Jan. 9 2012 at 9:50 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you so much!(: I'm not really sure what I intended this to be when I wrote it, but what's your interpretation of it?

on Jan. 9 2012 at 9:44 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

this is beautiful. i can just feel the emotion with your word choice. great job :)

on Jan. 4 2012 at 5:25 am
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you(: my other three should be up soon:)

Manish9 SILVER said...
on Jan. 4 2012 at 5:21 am
Manish9 SILVER, Kanpur, Other
6 articles 12 photos 110 comments
nice work ... keep it up !!!

on Jan. 3 2012 at 5:44 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks!! ^^ what do you think it's about? Because I'd love some interpretations(:

on Jan. 3 2012 at 5:37 pm
InvisibleHeart GOLD, Barony, Other
15 articles 4 photos 36 comments
Beautiful and seductive! I love your writing style. Very lovely, well done!


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