Heartbreak Thy Name is Guinevere

Our ending was trite...
Her own cheating revealed
with my ex best friend.

She left me broken,
my heart mangled and ripped,
Why I ask you? Why??





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ChangeIsCertain said...
Jan. 3, 2012 at 4:44 pm
Wow... I don't know why the rest of my comment cut off. I was saying that I liked your poem as it was very straight to the point.
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 5:22 pm
Thank you! But do you feel that it is too focused on heartbreak?
 
ChangeIsCertain replied...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 6:35 pm
I don't think it's too focused on the heartbreak, but it could spend more time describing what happened or how he feels.
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 6:39 pm
Duly noted~ thank you for your comments:)
 
ChangeIsCertain said...
Jan. 3, 2012 at 4:44 pm
Arthurian legend.
 
SkyyeTrekk replied...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 2:38 pm
I liked the poem and I liked your title :-) Well done :-)
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 5:02 am
Thank you~
 
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