Heartbeat

By IAmWhoIWantToBe, Manila, Philippines

I lay my head on your chest,
And listen to your heart beat.
I love that I can trouble it,
Make it fast, make it panic.
I love that I can attack you
With sensations you have no plan of dodging.
But maybe, just maybe,
It is the other way around.

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TheCapturedBat said...
Apr. 28, 2012 at 9:12 am:

amazing! everything about it is beautiful and insightful!

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beautifulspirit said...
Apr. 17, 2012 at 6:05 am:

Your last two lines don't flow with the rest of the poem. The ending seems too abrupt---you vould expand the piece more for a greater effect.

IAmWhoIWantToBe replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 4:43 am :

Thanks for the comment. But I don't actually have the guts to make longer poems. I'll try though :)

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Josika.Nav said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 1:25 am:

hey!

i wholeheartedly agree with you! when you love someone, it is nice to have them love you back ! awesome poem. i love the flow. it is short , and sweet. it is so simple yet meaningful. thats what i like most about it. great work and keep writing !! XD !!