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What I Could Never Tell My Mother MAG

February 1, 2008
By Anonymous

What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.



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on Mar. 4 2009 at 9:06 pm
WHOiNEED2B BRONZE, Tigerton, Wisconsin
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I like the way it seemed to show the emotion. Of that you keep a secret and she knowing still let's you keep it. It shows, and i feel an understanding towards it.

K.K said...
on Mar. 3 2009 at 10:41 pm
hey your poem was very unique and pretty it flowed nicely and it made perfect since your an amazing writer born with true talent congrats for getting it published.

on Mar. 3 2009 at 1:07 am
brokenbutterfly SILVER, Lancaster, Pennsylvania
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Wow nice poem. you seem to be really good at writing by the way you use your words. I adore who you put them together

on Mar. 2 2009 at 6:00 pm
KaylaRock BRONZE, Fairmont, West Virginia
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it made me keep wondering what the secret could possibly be! there's so many secrets to chose from! it;s very interesting, and quite bewildering.

on Mar. 2 2009 at 3:36 pm
Sydney(: BRONZE, N/a, New Hampshire
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hmm...

on Feb. 26 2009 at 2:54 am
oruga101 BRONZE, Lexington, Kentucky
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That was very interesting. And aorta was a nice fresh word that I haven't seen in a while. The whole thing gave off a hushed vibe that kept me interested.

Congrats on getting published!



If you don't mind, please go read, rate, and comment on my poem. Please!



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on Feb. 25 2009 at 8:48 pm
Great!!!! It was reaching out and grabbing me at every turn. Suprub.

I can't think of any other words to discribe it. I loved every minute of it.

on Feb. 16 2009 at 11:11 pm
Madelyn1231 GOLD, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Why must the bounds of love and hate continually be so muddled?

Very good:] keep writing :]

Check out my stuff please :]

i just got my email and my stuff is on RAW :]

im not sure how it works but my name is Madie K. and i have like... 3?...poems on mine so...take a look!

mcBut3r SILVER said...
on Feb. 16 2009 at 8:14 pm
mcBut3r SILVER, South Yarmouth, Massachusetts
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i really liked this poem alot. its true when your a teenager and ur growing up...

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on Feb. 15 2009 at 10:21 pm
KaylaAnne GOLD, North Platte, Nebraska
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That was very good. Please, go and reag my article in the Heros section. It's titled ,"Freedom".

Flux_Day said...
on Feb. 13 2009 at 4:11 pm
Reminds me of faerie tales and the way your mind wonders into letting you think there are other worlds out there...

on Feb. 6 2009 at 12:33 am
This poem sorta relates to what i'm going through right now. Very good! I wish i was that good of a writer...

sahsia102 said...
on Feb. 4 2009 at 5:06 pm
This poem depicts perfectly the sentiments of having a secret you can't express. I love it! Please write more!

Nicovera said...
on Feb. 4 2009 at 12:36 pm
wow. I loved this poem! Especially the reference to puzzle pieces. My mom and I used to put puzzles together all the time! This poem is very clean and to the point, and very origonal.

on Jan. 24 2009 at 2:01 am
Great poem I am glad it was in the magazine!

on Jan. 14 2009 at 1:26 pm
this is soo cute! its amazing i love every line of it. and ppl can rly relate to it, definatly me at least. but its rly good, great job :)

on Jan. 7 2009 at 1:29 am
This poem was really good.I like the part about secrets being like puzzle pieces because it is sooo true. I like how yu don't tell us what the secret is, because its not really important. Awesome job, wish i could write like this!!!

almost_there said...
on Jan. 4 2009 at 12:38 am
I like this, especially the part about how maybe the real secret is that curious need to protect things/secrets- even if the things themselves aren't that secret or needing to stay hidden, it is that inexplicable need to hide them. You carried that sentiment very well, and I think a lot of people can relate

on Dec. 31 2008 at 4:04 am
this poem is so true and its awsome. nice job.

Redemption65 said...
on Dec. 14 2008 at 2:53 pm
Good. I like how you do not tell the reader what the secret is, but I feel when you got to the climax of your poem your ending was too abrupt. There needed to be more.