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"She's Mine"

I see you almost every work day,
But you don’t see you.
I know the beauty that lies
Within you, dormant.

I want you to see you.

You’re smart,
Intelligent,
And worth every word in the dictionary.
I want to be the guy that says,
“She’s beautiful,
And mine,
And she knows it.”



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Sophie Rose C. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 9:59 am:
I like this one because it is unusual in writing (the subject matter - at least i think so) but ordinary in the world.
 
Sophie Rose C. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 10:00 am :
sorry I posted the first sentence twice!!!
 
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Sophie Rose C. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 9:54 am:
I like this one because it is unusual in writing (at least for me it is) but ordinary in the world. one thing I thought could MAYBE have a tweak - "You're smart, Intelligent," is maybe saying the same thing twice, right? how about "I want you to see you." and then "Clever you, The you worth every word in the dictionary" okay, I'm sorry. I said WAY too much :(
 
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