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Can you tell me what happened to us?
I sure can't.
I've asked myself a thousand times.
I've still got no answer.
Can you tell me why we lost our bond?
I sure can't.
I've asked myself a thousand times.
I've still got no answer.
When we were young, we were so close.
We'd go bike riding, and hiking.
Remember our hike through Hawthorne Park?
We'd go fishing, and we'd play games.
Remember that time I accidentally hooked your ear while casting?
We'd laugh and joke.
Do you remember?
I think I know what happened to us.
We grew up.
We drifted apart.
We went our separate ways.
But how? Why?
Sometimes I think about you.
I wonder if your happy.
Sometimes I miss you.
You've got quite a life now.
You've got a girlfriend and a baby.
You've got a job and an apartment.
Do you ever think of me?
Do you ever miss me, even just a little?
I'd like to ask you how your doing,
but I'd get the cold shoulder.
I'd like to communicate with you,
but you'd shoo me away.
I'd like to ask you the questions that run through my mind,
but you'd ignore me.
Is it because you don't agree with the way I am living my life?
If it is, I can't change that.
I have a right to live my life the way I choose, as do you.
Is it because I moved away?
I can't come back.
Why won't you hear me out?
Why won't you speak to me?
Don't you ever think of our childhood?
I sure do.
Don't you ever think of me?
Don't you ever miss me, even just a little?
Why did we drift apart?
I miss you.
Why did we go our separate ways?




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real_me@26,33 said...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 11:48 pm:

This was rly good :) the feeling and emtion i it were amazing!!!!!! keep writing 

 

 
sunshine7223 replied...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 12:35 am :
Thank you so much. :)
 
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Resonating_Words said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 1:04 am:

Like everything else I've read by you, this has a natural flow that just works. I get a sense of the emotion without it being too dramatic, and I love the subtle imagery of it. 

All I can say negatively is that you say "hiking" and then "hike" in two back to back lines, which tripped me up momentarily. However, this is all I can find, and this isn't even really a problem -- just me being derp when I read.

Very nicely done, and a well earned 5/5 (:

 
sunshine7223 replied...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 12:42 am :
Thank you SO much. :) That really means alot. :))
 
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youngspeare said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 1:02 am:
Great job sunshine! This is definitely an amazing piece, keep posting :) 
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 12:43 am :
Thank you! :)
 
Paris1997This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 11:46 pm :
Impressive. Very nice. :)
 
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