Separate Ways.

December 2, 2011
By sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me


Can you tell me what happened to us?
I sure can't.
I've asked myself a thousand times.
I've still got no answer.
Can you tell me why we lost our bond?
I sure can't.
I've asked myself a thousand times.
I've still got no answer.
When we were young, we were so close.
We'd go bike riding, and hiking.
Remember our hike through Hawthorne Park?
We'd go fishing, and we'd play games.
Remember that time I accidentally hooked your ear while casting?
We'd laugh and joke.
Do you remember?
I think I know what happened to us.
We grew up.
We drifted apart.
We went our separate ways.
But how? Why?
Sometimes I think about you.
I wonder if your happy.
Sometimes I miss you.
You've got quite a life now.
You've got a girlfriend and a baby.
You've got a job and an apartment.
Do you ever think of me?
Do you ever miss me, even just a little?
I'd like to ask you how your doing,
but I'd get the cold shoulder.
I'd like to communicate with you,
but you'd shoo me away.
I'd like to ask you the questions that run through my mind,
but you'd ignore me.
Is it because you don't agree with the way I am living my life?
If it is, I can't change that.
I have a right to live my life the way I choose, as do you.
Is it because I moved away?
I can't come back.
Why won't you hear me out?
Why won't you speak to me?
Don't you ever think of our childhood?
I sure do.
Don't you ever think of me?
Don't you ever miss me, even just a little?
Why did we drift apart?
I miss you.
Why did we go our separate ways?


The author's comments:
I was inspired to write this piece while thinking of my brother. After we grew up, our bond fell apart. And after I moved away, we completely stopped talking. He says, "I want nothing to do with you." The poem should explain why our relationship is the way it is. I hope you enjoy, and hopefully can relate in some way!

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 7 comments.


on Jan. 1 2012 at 12:35 am
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you so much. :)

on Dec. 11 2011 at 11:48 pm
iloveu32 SILVER, Las Vegas, Nevada
9 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nobody can make you feel inferior without their consent. -Eleanor Roosevelt

This was rly good :) the feeling and emtion i it were amazing!!!!!! keep writing 

 


Paris1997 GOLD said...
on Dec. 11 2011 at 11:46 pm
Paris1997 GOLD, Lakeside, California
13 articles 4 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
The power of imagination makes us infinite. -John Muir

Impressive. Very nice. :)

on Dec. 11 2011 at 12:43 am
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you! :)

on Dec. 11 2011 at 12:42 am
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you SO much. :) That really means alot. :))

on Dec. 10 2011 at 1:04 am
Resonating_Words SILVER, Dallas, Texas
5 articles 10 photos 87 comments

Like everything else I've read by you, this has a natural flow that just works. I get a sense of the emotion without it being too dramatic, and I love the subtle imagery of it. 

All I can say negatively is that you say "hiking" and then "hike" in two back to back lines, which tripped me up momentarily. However, this is all I can find, and this isn't even really a problem -- just me being derp when I read.

Very nicely done, and a well earned 5/5 (:


on Dec. 10 2011 at 1:02 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
1 article 0 photos 273 comments

Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

Great job sunshine! This is definitely an amazing piece, keep posting :) 


SciArc

MacMillan Books

Aspiring Writer? Take Our Online Course!