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Breaking free
feeling the Earth’s heartbeat,
breathing in with the wind.
Thunder of the tide,
crashing into the ocean.
Pulled under, like dead weight,
into the murky depths.
Golden rays of the sun
lure me back to the surface.
The sky is water-colored with orange,
as the sea tugs at my feet,
an invisible plea for me to go back in.
The sun has finally given up its throne
to the moon for the night.
Numb to all pain,
heart enraptured in the beauty of the world,
this is all there is right now.




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Matice said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 12:25 pm:

I enjoyed the images you used. Nice description. It was a powerful poem.

Please take a look at some of my work if you have a spare minute. :) I'd love to get some feedback.

 
ChaoticBliss replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:29 pm :
Thanks! :)
Okay, I will fo sho :D
 
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RebeccaJoyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:04 pm:
I loved how you found so many ways to express the ocean/water. Great job
 
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FlyingJay said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:53 pm:
I like it. its great. real good imagery and emotion. I felt like i was right there in the poem
 
ChaoticBliss replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:58 pm :
Thanks! :D
 
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mbrown106 said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:48 pm:
I felt like a spirit flitting about the land nearby sea. Great work!
 
ChaoticBliss replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:58 pm :
Goal accomplished! :D Thank you.
 
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samwich7 said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:34 pm:
I can truly feel everything in it. Love this poem.
 
ChaoticBliss replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:57 pm :
Thank you samwich!!((:
 
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