I Think, Well I Know

November 26, 2011
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Yes I gotta say that I've been Physically
And mentally
hurt and neglected
Sometimes I feel like a car that has been purposely reacted
And I feel bad when I think about suicide
And how I still look you in the eyes
And act like everything is OK
But its not
I'm suicidal
And all the way
You
I
We look at each other like everything is OK
But its not
I'm not going to do it thou
I want to go to heaven
That's the only reason
Don't want to rot in hell
Nor wanna be a burden here on Earth
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Loki17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 4:20 pm
Confusing at times.  e.g. "Sometimes I feel like a car that has been purposely reacted."  But with some editing it would be quite strong!
 
Zahria replied...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 4:47 pm
i had said i feel like a car.... that has been rected purposly. like in a car accident. i think i know what i meant. but thanks
 
Loki17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 5:32 pm

oh you meant WRECKED! :0

 

 
Zahria replied...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 5:58 pm
yea i know i spelled it wrong sorry!!
 
Illuminatus said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:31 pm

GREAT STUFF >>>> You are an Exemplary !!!!

 

 
Zahria replied...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:35 pm
Thank you... That means alot.
 
danceonwater said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:28 pm
this is really deep and honest...I like it!
 
Zahria replied...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:33 pm
thank u... i tryed to write from the heart.
 
YourGirlChels said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 5:20 pm
so simple but so much meaning loveddddd it
 
Zahria replied...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 5:31 pm
Thank you so much
 
Matice said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:37 pm

A very strong poem. You did a good job. I liked the choppiness of it, but it wasn't TOO choppy. You had a nice flow.

If you have time, I'd love for you to take a look at some of my work and maybe return the favor? :)

 
Zahria replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:43 pm
I will most definetly return the favor and Thank you for Commenting.
 
Alison4355 said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:02 pm
Hello my name is Alison and I love this poem it is so.... whats the word Unique and very honest. If this is a true story then IM SORRY But this is a cool poem to me.
 
Zahria replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:19 pm
Thanks alot
 
Zahria said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 8:20 pm
Thank you for the tip ill keep that in mind next time. And Thank you in general. Part of it true
 
Resonating_Words said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 7:46 pm

This has room for improvement -- for example saying "wanna" is too conversational in comparison to the rest of the poem.

In general, I do like it, and I'm curious if this is truthful or imagined.

 
Come-n-Gone said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 7:45 pm
If this is a real situation for you, i'm so sorry. But either way it's an amazing poem.
 
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