Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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Keenan BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:26 am
Keenan BRONZE, Dennison, Ohio
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I'm not going to lie, it was a little weird. Especially the title. Wow...

alexc25 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:26 am
alexc25 BRONZE, Uhrichsville, Ohio
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WOW! this poem is creepy

Unknown said...
on Jan. 24 2010 at 6:41 pm
Amazing! Very well done!

on Jan. 24 2010 at 6:20 pm
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"the greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return." -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

OH MY GOSH THIS IS MY FAVE OF ALL TIME!! VERY GOOD VERY GOOD!

on Jan. 24 2010 at 2:17 pm
SeanConnery BRONZE, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
A good deed never goes unpunished.

good poem

i like it

on Jan. 23 2010 at 3:44 pm
StevImagenary SILVER, Amarillo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
One smile can bring joy to everyone you see.

I loved it. I think it's great to show your inner self.

on Jan. 21 2010 at 7:50 pm
zacharydinan PLATINUM, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Maximilian, it was Edmond Dantes! (M. Morrel)

great job. It has a lot of hidden meaning. Please check out my poems.

on Jan. 19 2010 at 8:40 pm
sjmblue2 BRONZE, Kennesaw, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"This game is not easy, if it was easy everyone would do it, and if everyone did it, no one would be special."

I know this has meaning like someone else says....i really like it though, it really shows the reader what you all talking about.

Kara_333 said...
on Jan. 19 2010 at 6:50 pm
Kara_333, Peabody, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Lookin like a fool with ur pants on the ground

extremely mature. they r trying to capture their memories of childhood. Ur still there.

on Jan. 18 2010 at 8:42 pm
NickAdams BRONZE, Louisville, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"A way a lone a last a loved a long the // riverrun, past Eve and Adam\'s, from swerve of shore to bend of bay, brings us by a commodius vicus of recirculation back to Howth Castle and Environs." -James Joyce in Finnegans Wake

Interesting poem. It seems so symbolic, and I'm still trying to figure it out.; especially, I enjoyed your selective use of capitalization. A little confused about the rhyme scheme, though, for while your poem is listed as free verse, several of the lines rhyme. They seem intentional but also rather sporadic and arbitrarily chosen. Alas that I cannot seem into the poet's mind!

On the whole, great work.

laliel said...
on Jan. 18 2010 at 5:10 pm
i love it

i think you truly

captured what it is to be a kid

always trying to fly

on Jan. 18 2010 at 2:03 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
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Chilling poem! I nearly farted..

on Jan. 17 2010 at 6:00 pm
innocence BRONZE, San Jose, California
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"heres a lie i wish were true; i really really hate you too"

This poem reminds me of my parents! i love it so much!

your writing is awesome!

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on Jan. 16 2010 at 11:32 am
alexploi GOLD, Columbia, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"I've come to realize that the difference in sucess or failure is not in how you look, how you dress or how you're educated. It's how you think!" ~ Mac Anderson

Oh that was such a great poem!! I loved reading it!! Keep up the great work!!! If you get the chance, read some of mine!

dkA.M SILVER said...
on Jan. 16 2010 at 10:29 am
dkA.M SILVER, Vail, Arizona
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great writing you rok my sox

dkA.M SILVER said...
on Jan. 16 2010 at 10:28 am
dkA.M SILVER, Vail, Arizona
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Well that's what I am guessing assuming how immature you are....... *sarcastic thumbs up*

on Jan. 16 2010 at 2:50 am
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LIVE LIFE 2 DA FULLEST
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OMG UR REALLY TALENTED LIKE REALLY WOW DATS REALLY GOOD :D KEEP IT UP

on Jan. 15 2010 at 4:49 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
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I love this its really good.!

Check out my work.. tell me how u like it :)

on Jan. 15 2010 at 2:49 pm
maebug126 BRONZE, Millington, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
A kiss makes the heart young again and wipes out the years.
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this is amazing!

on Jan. 15 2010 at 1:47 pm
Siraidly SILVER, Highland Park, Illinois
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is this pre-teen ink???


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