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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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AyeDaevon11 said...
on Mar. 1 at 1:25 pm
AyeDaevon11, Brooklyn Park, Minnesota
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hmmm. can a dad have a womb?

kalpop said...
on Feb. 8 at 9:15 am
kalpop, Bayonne, New Jersey
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daddy's womb?????☠️☠️☠️☠️☠️

on Jan. 30 at 3:28 pm
rachelallex BRONZE, New York, New York
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Wow, this is amazing, I really love your work.

on Jan. 30 at 3:28 pm
rachelallex BRONZE, New York, New York
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Wow, this is amazing, I really love your work.

Anno82 SILVER said...
on Jan. 19 at 5:09 pm
Anno82 SILVER, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“Peace doesn't come from finding a lake with no storms. It comes from having Jesus in the boat." -John Ortberg
"God doesn't break things so He can fix them; He fixes broken things so He can use them." -Bob Goff
"Is prayer your steering wheel or your spare tire?" -Corrie Ten Boom

I was born in 2008... ._.

on Nov. 1 2023 at 3:30 pm
Self-Scarred BRONZE, Temecula, California
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I love is so much!

on Oct. 26 2023 at 4:52 pm
MrAbyss PLATINUM, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
“Normality is a paved road, but no flowers grow on it.” -Vincent Van Gogh

Still popping up on this website. The author of this must be doing well now.

on Feb. 11 2023 at 10:43 pm
EmptyBox SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Really nice poem. Also a poem that actually rhymes instead of a massive, structureless paragraph filled with mundane thoughts formatted in the style of a poem.

on Nov. 2 2022 at 10:21 pm
AngelsImagination GOLD, Leicester, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Eleanor Roosevelt - "Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That's why we call it 'The Present'"

Emily Dickinson - "Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all."

I am inspired by this beautifully written poem. So much feelings/emotions was incorporated; making the words flow. I love the idea of the chain which symbolizes the protection of a father, and at the same time could also symbolize the limits of the child because of his/her fathers grasp. It could be interpreted in many ways which is interesting. This poem though was just in all, a masterpiece.

on Oct. 5 2022 at 10:49 am
glovermaddi PLATINUM, Summerset, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
“Destruction is a form of creation.”

DAAAAAAMN

on Sep. 21 2022 at 11:52 am
Snake_Skullz SILVER, Pella Ia, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Not in doing what you like, but liking what you do is the secret of happiness" - J.M Barrie

Since 2008?? This is an amazing poem!

on Jun. 30 2022 at 7:11 pm
Ashila21 BRONZE, Chesterfield, Missouri
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This is a really interesting poem and could be interpreted in different ways. The last line sent shivers down my spine, and as a metaphor, a chain is a perfect way to describe the relationship of parent to child.

on Mar. 10 2022 at 11:00 am
poetofthedeepbluesea GOLD, Nashville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"One day you will tell the story of how you've overcome what you're going through now and it will become a part of someone else's survival guide."
- Unknown

You must have a true talent for this poem to remain relevant for 14 years.

on Mar. 10 2022 at 10:59 am
poetofthedeepbluesea GOLD, Nashville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"One day you will tell the story of how you've overcome what you're going through now and it will become a part of someone else's survival guide."
- Unknown

I keep coming back to this poem. I can't count how many times I've read it. This is a true work of art, something every writer wants to produce.

elfmaster said...
on Jan. 28 2022 at 10:08 am
elfmaster, Clio, Michigan
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so sad and caring

on Jan. 27 2022 at 12:37 am
aalaazah1 PLATINUM, Colombo, Other
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Favorite Quote:
where words fail music speaks
success is a journey, not a destination

when you feel your best, everybody else can feel it too - ARIANA GRANDE

If you are able to look yourself
in the mirror every day
with the decisions that you make,
that's where power starts - SELENA GOMEZ

Before you judge people judge yourself - ZAYN MALIK

haters will say what they want, but their hate will
never stop you from chasing your dream- JUSTIN BIEBER

If you follow your dreams,
it means you follow your heart.
if you do follow your heart,
I don't think you can go wrong- CELINE DION

It was amazing....

on Dec. 14 2021 at 9:32 am
GoPanthers1234, Davidson, North Carolina
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I liked the use of figurative language and how the dad made sure that his son couldn't drown.

JulianHoops said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 11:12 pm
JulianHoops, Harrisburg, North Carolina
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I enjoy the fact that the father is trying to protect his son from drowning. On the other hand, I was hoping that the dad would allow his son to go deeper in water.

AP2207 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:45 pm
AP2207, Moorsville, North Carolina
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I like the figurative language this poem uses and how it is described. I also liked how you used symbolism through out it.

Brady123456 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.