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Three Blind Eyes

THREE BLIND EYES:

-I watch him walk slowly down the block
being guided carefully by his loyal dog
and I envy the bond between them
as I see him feed her little treats
Which she looks at longingly then eats.
He smiles triumphantly


-His clouded, filmy eyes
tell a constricting story of all the lies
he has been told because he is blind.
They think they can trick him
and act as if he doesn't exist to them,
but to me he is the reason I am happy.


-I will sometimes help him across the road
and help unlock his front door into his beautiful home.
There are pictures of his wife in every room.
Wow, she was so beautiful.
But he fell in love with her soul, not her beauty.
He couldn't see her. His children put the pictures there.


-Three blind eyes.
His two sightless eyes that see his loved ones in his mind's eye.





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SecretFlame said...
Dec. 20, 2011 at 1:37 pm
This is gorgeous! The rhyming fits with the poem and doesn't hinder it. This is very creative and I love the story you told with it. Well done! I don't have really any criticism. 
 
Sinc321 said...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 3:42 pm

wow.... very nice!!!

 

 
thefamoustapper said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 4:47 pm
It's such an interesting idea! u wrote it beautifully nice job!
 
slaborin98 said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 2:35 pm

ur a good person with a good heart anyone would be lucky 2 have a frnd as great as  u il ove ur work

 

 
Hikari.This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:11 pm
WOW that was so, so, so beautiful and impacetful.... Wow, I love it!!
 
AnimaCordis replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:13 pm
Oh this is so moving! I love this one! It's like a riddle!
 
Neytiri replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:17 pm
AWWW!! Thanks so much guys!! I'll definitely return the favour!! x x x x <3<3<3
 
zombiescream.98 said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:09 pm
Wow! I love the last two stanzas the most they're amazing!
 
pinkowl said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 2:15 pm
this is precious. it gave me the chills, in a heart-warming way. i love how authentic it is! so creative and deep, yet with a great simple flow! keep up the great work!
 
Neytiri replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 2:25 pm
Thanks hun!! That's so sweet!! x x
 
ColorfulExpectations said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 2:14 pm

This was so beautiful, it almost made me cry! I like the line,

"But he fell in love with her soul, not her beauty."

This poem was very touching, not angsty or depressing. We need more poems like this on TI. BTW, you're awesome, keep writing! <3

 
ColorfulExpectations replied...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 2:15 pm
-__- I keep posting things that people have already said...
 
Neytiri replied...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 2:18 pm
Thanks hun!!!! That's so sweet!! thank you!! your poems are amazing aswell!!! I especially love 'Eyes of the Dead'. Gorgeous!! Thanks gal!!! x x x x x x x x x x
 
Jennypig said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 2:03 pm
This is an unusual format like idk maybe its just unusual for me but i love it =) just sayin
 
Neytiri replied...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 2:07 pm

Thanks Jen!!!x x x x x

 

 
Wonderment said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 5:18 pm
I like it. I like that it reads like a story, I like the images it shows as well.
 
ReadWriteBreathe said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 4:21 pm
I love this! I love how it tells a story and saying that he's been told many lies. The line, "He fell in love with her soul, not her beauty" is really good. Great job
 
Neytiri replied...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 6:09 pm
thank you so much hun!!!xxxx
 
Lilacs_Smell_Wonnerful This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 1:30 pm

Very nice, I like the way that it tells a story. :)

-Lilac

 
Neytiri replied...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 6:08 pm
AAWWW!! Thanks guys!! xxxxx
 
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