Another One

October 28, 2011
By Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
29 articles 0 photos 109 comments

New sun veiled by shifting fog,
Trees and colors slice through mist.
A line of deer on hidden paths
Travels quickly through the wood.

Metal beasts roar to and fro,
Noisy, hurried, speeding on.
Twisted roads through fields and trees,
Painted roads of dirty stone.

Nature's beasts press further on,
Suddenly, the trail is lost.
Pavement guards the way ahead,
Fearful now, the deer must cross.

Faster fly the metal steeds,
Carelessly, they thunder by.
One of them holds Doom inside,
Soon, a fleeting soul will die.

All the deer have crossed but one,
Nervously, one hesitates.
Slowly steps on dirty stone
Almost crossed, one meets with Fate.

Round the bend the engine howls,
One deer freezes, poised to fly.
A cry of death, then mangled flesh,
The noble beast is tossed aside.

Curses, screams, the tires spin,
Dented metal limps away.
Frightened deer melt into mist,
Only instincts, safe for now.

Silent, alone, the broken one
Lies shredded, blood on dirty stone.
No use, no meaning, only death
The morning is a quiet tomb.

New sun veiled by shifting fog,
Trees and colors slice through mist.
A line of deer on hidden paths
Travels quickly, missing one.



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on Dec. 28 2012 at 10:04 am
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
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Yeah it's a partner poem to 'The Moose.'  Thanks for reading.

on Dec. 27 2012 at 11:32 pm
Padfoot507 PLATINUM, Omaha, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
“It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.”
-Albus Dumbledore

"I'm just a little bit caught in the middle,
Life is a maze, and love is a ridde."
-Lenka

*alot like your poem the Moose, *underlined

on Dec. 27 2012 at 11:31 pm
Padfoot507 PLATINUM, Omaha, Nebraska
23 articles 2 photos 138 comments

Favorite Quote:
“It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.”
-Albus Dumbledore

"I'm just a little bit caught in the middle,
Life is a maze, and love is a ridde."
-Lenka

This is  alot like your the Moose, but it's different as well. I just realized this is all underline but I'm just going to ignore that. Anyways, great poem, beautiful imagery. I enjoy your works on nature.

on Dec. 10 2011 at 9:36 am
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
29 articles 0 photos 109 comments

Yeah, it's really me.  Thanks :)

 


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on Dec. 10 2011 at 9:32 am
apple2, Yellow Montain, Other
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Is it really you write?

so great!

i love it,The morning is a quiet tomb.

Very rhythm of the poem.


on Nov. 28 2011 at 7:54 pm
Resonating_Words SILVER, Dallas, Texas
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"A cry of death, then mangled flesh"

 

Mangled. One of my favorite words. Ever. I commend you for using it.

 

That aside, I liked this. 


on Nov. 22 2011 at 5:28 pm
anna_banana BRONZE, Wilmington, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
No one can make you feel inferior without your consent- Eleanor Roosevelt

I really like this! It's really thoughtful and written beautifully :)


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