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I saw her standing in the grass
She was surrounded by flowers
Goldenrod
Dandelion
One drop of rain
The floating pollen drifted around her
Two drops of rain
She sensed fear rushing towards her
Three,four,five drops of rain
Her body divided itself into hotness
Coldness
A softness and a hardness
A trembling and a not trembling
The wind whistled a single note across the black morning sky
All rushing on down around in a spouting roar ,
A rivering stream
Heading towards the morning
A dim light appeared
The little clump of flowers stood alone
Awaiting sunrise.



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NadimAzar said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 2:01 pm:
Thank you.. i appreciate it
 
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OceanFey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 11:23 am:
I love the sheer delicacy of the language in this poem! Keep up the good work - can't wait to see more of your poems. 
 
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NadimAzar said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 12:37 pm:
Thanks a lot for all the support
 
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AlaskaFrost This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 5, 2011 at 11:31 am:

wow this is so beautiful!! it's definitely one of my favorites I've read on here. I hope it gets published in the print magazine!!

"The wind whistled a single note across the black morning sky" <-- favorite line

 
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NadimAzar said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 2:16 pm:
thanks :)I Appreciate it ..
 
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ReadWriteBreathe said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 1:14 pm:
This is really good. I love the imagry. Really nice job.
 
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NadimAzar said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 1:06 pm:
Thanks.. I truly appreciate your comment :)
 
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ADifferentKindOfPrincess said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 12:58 pm:
Wow. You are amazing!
 
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NadimAzar said...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 1:45 pm:
Thanks everyone for your support
 
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YaraSerhal said...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 10:44 am:
I absolutely love that poem ; couldn't stop reading it for many consecutive times. Keep it up ! xx
 
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Emin3mAC said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 7:29 pm:
Beautifly Written Hun(: Keep posting can't wait to read your next works(((: Check mine out iif you have the chance((:
 
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Mikey72 said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 3:51 pm:
Wow ..It is truly a wonderful poem..
 
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andyrahi said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 3:46 pm:
So deep, expressive & well written. Love it! Keep it up! :) xxx
 
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