Rambles From a Broken Heart

October 11, 2011
By LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥


I know your gone.
I still look around for you.
I know you were hurt but,I don't
understand you.

At first, I couldn't believe that you took your own life away.

I didn't know how sad you truly were. I didn't know how bad they're words actually hurt.

I wish that I knew!
I wish you knew, just how much we all loved you.

I wonder if you still would have done it, if you seen how much everyone suffered.

Would you have done it if you seen?

How bad we all fought,
how sad we all felt.

Would you have done it if you had seen?

The horrible ways they tried to get rid of the pain.

BROKEN!

All of us are now. We are changed. We no longer fit together.

All of our pain, guilt, and shame altered our shapes.

We can no longer try and pick the pieces up and put them together.

We no longer stick...

You held us together and your suicide tore us apart.

So, now i will always wonder..
Would you still have done it if you seen?


The author's comments:
R.I.P

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LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Apr. 26 2012 at 7:26 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

Thanks, I enjoy getting feedback. It helps.

on Apr. 19 2012 at 7:59 am
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

Yes, there are a few grammer mistakes in there. I reccomend looking over it and editing it.

This is NOT a ramble. It's just your feelings and I love reading about them. I'm rating 5/5 even though it had some mistakes. :))


LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 10:46 am
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

thank you. :)

on Jan. 14 2012 at 8:54 pm
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
40 articles 5 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

I really like this EXCEPT proper grammar tells us that it is "would you still have done it IF YOU SAW!" Other than that, you spaced everything out really well in this poem and it read very nicely. I'm sorry about the suicide. Nice poem, though :)


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