why daddy

October 6, 2011
why daddy did you have to go
why did you have to leaveyou left my self esteem low
why did you leave me on my own
why did you leave till I was full grown
why did you leave me all to mother
you can never be replaced by another
when I look at all the colors
of the rainbow
I lay my head low
and think of all the memories
we could have made
but it just fades
to black ness
of the huge mess
my life has become
why daddy did you have to go
why did you have to leave
you left my self esteem low
why did you leave me on my own
why did you leave till I was full grown
why did you leave me all to mother
you can never be replaced by another





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Little.Miss said...
Oct. 11, 2011 at 8:08 pm

This needs a little bit of editing to the grammar and sentence fluency, but it is very interesting. I liked it!

Keep writing! :)

 
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you replied...
Oct. 12, 2011 at 9:07 am
Thank you so much this peace really speaks to me every time I read it I start crying
 
Little.Miss replied...
Oct. 12, 2011 at 2:52 pm
I don't blame you--it sounds like a sad story. But that's what writing is for: to get the strongest of your feelings out onto paper, and give you a little relief!
 
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you replied...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 9:10 am

thank you

 

 
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