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Confused, is what I am,
Because You chose mine out of all the other plans.
You picked me up, with no intention of setting me down,
It's funny how we're always walking hand in hand.
I know You would never let me drown,
But I seem to just keep swimming down.

Down, Down, into the tunnel of sin,
But You still always ask if I can let You in.

I open the door and we share many happy moments,
But then he creeps in too,
It's Him, The Opponent.
He brings back those terrible memories of sinful desires that I think I cant resist,
So the Righteous Man walks out with tears on his lids.

I have a periodic moment of joy,
Before my opponent comes again to collect my Due.
They say whatever he giveth,
he taketh away from you.

So here I am, all broken and battered,
There's a knock on the door,
Hmmm so I still Flatter?
I open the door and to my surprise,
the Righteous Man is standing with Desire in His eyes.
With No Doubt, I bring Him in.

Now, My Life Is Whole Again.



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hotshotThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 6:58 pm
this was really descriptive and just amazing. keep this up :)
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 7:02 pm
Gracias ! ^_^
 
Benjamin444 said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 5:12 pm
I really like this. You went very deep with this and it has a lot of meaning!!
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 5:26 pm
Thank you so much ! I tried :3
 
EthanCalhoun said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 7:33 am
ver well written, i like it alot
 
EthanCalhoun replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 7:33 am
very* my fault lol
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 5:03 pm
lol . .Thank you sir :)
 
willowtreegirl said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 9:24 pm
also I think you could work on how your choosing to rhyme because it is a little choppy and scattered when I'm reading it, love it lots though!
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 5:05 pm
Thank you so much, Will definetly try ! :)
 
willowtreegirl said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 9:21 pm
very well written, it is obvious that you wrote this from the heart. You had some intresting word choices that made me think. thanks!
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 5:04 pm
thank you ! :) yess, i did
 
readaholicThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 4:29 pm
Awesome poem! It felt really powerful :O
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 8:24 pm
Thank You, Glad It Did :D
 
JaneCapelleThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 9:23 pm
I love it. love it love it love it. There's just something.. unique about it....great job! =) 5/5!
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 2:27 pm
Thank you so much!!!
 
White_Trash843 said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 6:50 pm
I LOVE IT GREAT WORK i love the rhyme pattern and the vocabulary truly impressive KEEP WRITING!
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 2:30 pm
I REALLY appreciate this since I've just started posting them... Will definitely do more... Thanks ! :)
 
FangPoet said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 4:25 pm
Wow! I was so very impressed by this! Had a nice rhyme sceme,and word choice.
 
Ruthie_j replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 2:32 pm
Thanks a bunch !!! Sorry I'm just now replying to this ! :[
 
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