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September 25, 2011
By Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .


Confused, is what I am,
Because You chose mine out of all the other plans.
You picked me up, with no intention of setting me down,
It's funny how we're always walking hand in hand.
I know You would never let me drown,
But I seem to just keep swimming down.

Down, Down, into the tunnel of sin,
But You still always ask if I can let You in.

I open the door and we share many happy moments,
But then he creeps in too,
It's Him, The Opponent.
He brings back those terrible memories of sinful desires that I think I cant resist,
So the Righteous Man walks out with tears on his lids.

I have a periodic moment of joy,
Before my opponent comes again to collect my Due.
They say whatever he giveth,
he taketh away from you.

So here I am, all broken and battered,
There's a knock on the door,
Hmmm so I still Flatter?
I open the door and to my surprise,
the Righteous Man is standing with Desire in His eyes.
With No Doubt, I bring Him in.

Now, My Life Is Whole Again.


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on Jan. 30 2012 at 6:58 pm
hotshot PLATINUM, North Sioux City, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Go confidently in the direction of your dreams. Live the life you have imagined.
Henry David Thoreau

this was really descriptive and just amazing. keep this up :)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 5:26 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

Thank you so much ! I tried :3

on Jan. 30 2012 at 5:12 pm
Benjamin444 BRONZE, Lenexa, Kansas
2 articles 38 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You will never be what you were meant to be if you're not having fun"- In Wal-Mart, on some product.

I really like this. You went very deep with this and it has a lot of meaning!!

on Jan. 30 2012 at 5:05 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

Thank you so much, Will definetly try ! :)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 5:04 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

thank you ! :) yess, i did

on Jan. 30 2012 at 5:03 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

lol . .Thank you sir :)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 7:33 am
EthanCalhoun PLATINUM, Fairview, New Jersey
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very* my fault lol

on Jan. 30 2012 at 7:33 am
EthanCalhoun PLATINUM, Fairview, New Jersey
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ver well written, i like it alot

on Jan. 29 2012 at 9:24 pm
seaofsorrows GOLD, Lynnwood, Washington
13 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love. A four letter word, short but true. With no hope of being defined. But what's new?



-S. Jordan

also I think you could work on how your choosing to rhyme because it is a little choppy and scattered when I'm reading it, love it lots though!

on Jan. 29 2012 at 9:21 pm
seaofsorrows GOLD, Lynnwood, Washington
13 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love. A four letter word, short but true. With no hope of being defined. But what's new?



-S. Jordan

very well written, it is obvious that you wrote this from the heart. You had some intresting word choices that made me think. thanks!

on Jan. 29 2012 at 8:24 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

Thank You, Glad It Did :D

on Jan. 29 2012 at 4:29 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

Awesome poem! It felt really powerful :O

on Jan. 29 2012 at 2:32 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

Thanks a bunch !!! Sorry I'm just now replying to this ! :[

on Jan. 29 2012 at 2:30 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

I REALLY appreciate this since I've just started posting them... Will definitely do more... Thanks ! :)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 2:27 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
3 articles 5 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

Thank you so much!!!

on Jan. 27 2012 at 9:23 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

I love it. love it love it love it. There's just something.. unique about it....great job! =) 5/5!

Phoenix. said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 6:50 pm
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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I LOVE IT GREAT WORK i love the rhyme pattern and the vocabulary truly impressive KEEP WRITING!

on Oct. 8 2011 at 4:25 pm
FangPoet DIAMOND, Wichita, Kansas
74 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am yours as long as you are mine."

"Teenagers are in the forest of bad ideas an hormones."

"Your everything i want but nothing i need."
"I hate you so much ... i love you".

"Its the ugliest cute thing ever"!

"Everything is cute in its own way

In love the paradox occurs that two beings become one and yet remain two. - Erich Fromm

Wow! I was so very impressed by this! Had a nice rhyme sceme,and word choice.