The Dance MAG

August 20, 2011
By wordlover27 GOLD, Vancouver, Other
wordlover27 GOLD, Vancouver, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness..."
-Audrey Hepburn


I always watched my parents dance.
I can barely remember a time
When
My mother,
Fluid and graceful,
Would caress my father's cheek in her hand.
My father
Would embrace her
And with strong, steady footsteps
Guide her across the dance floor
Of life.
He would spin her 'round and 'round
She looked like a graceful swan
Twirling in her ruffly white dress.
He would let her spin, enthralled
By her beauty.
And he loved her.

But I can clearly remember the time
She spun farther and farther away
Until he was clasping her fingers
Trying to hold on
His face echoing his frustration
But she wouldn't come back.
Finally
In anger
My father let go
And stalked off the dance floor
Saying,
“I can't do this anymore.”
My mother
Stumbled and fell
And looked at me
With hollow,
empty
eyes.
A fallen swan now.

I look away
Close my eyes
And try to remember
The beginning of the dance.
Only to find
I can't.



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on Nov. 6 2013 at 12:51 pm
RosaDarling SILVER, Lydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I am no bird and no net ensnares me. I am a free human being with an independent will.

I loved this poem!.The dance analogy was great and i think the structure is really flowing.Thanks for sharing!

on Apr. 28 2012 at 2:29 am
wordlover27 GOLD, Vancouver, Other
15 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness..."
-Audrey Hepburn

Thank you :) I wrote this poem during an emotional time for my family, so became such an effective image for expressing my feelings

on Apr. 26 2012 at 3:36 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

The emotions spilled all over the poem. And I love the creativity and the imagery. I love how you compare dance to your parents' relationship. Also, kudos for the last part where you captures the effect in the minds of those parents' children. Great job! No wonder this got into the magazine!!!

on Aug. 24 2011 at 8:19 pm
SunkistKisser BRONZE, Tempe, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Not one would mind, neither bird not tree
If mankind perished utterly
And Spring herself, when she woke at down,
Would hardly know that we were gone." ~Sara Teasdale
(Yea, I know, it's kind of deep, but I kind of dig it.))

Beautiful! I love the imagry and the way your eyes just flow down the words. Good job!!!




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