darkest night

August 9, 2011
darkness at
the edge of my sight
following me
here and there

i wonder at it
what is it
about the absence of light
that creates such fear?

but i am not afraid
the bats are my friends
fireflies lead me
wolves call me home

i wander in the gray twilight
the mix of day and night
welcoming the darkness
at the edge of my sight

for if there was no darkness
and there was only light
we’d never see the moon and stars
in the blackness of the sky

i love the day with all its color
but there’s something about the night
something about the shadowy shapes
and hooting calls of owls

and if I walk into the dark
and never see the light
was lost inside the blackness
never to be found

you’ll know that I became one with them
those warm open arms of night
here at last I’ve found my peace
beside my friends who cared





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Destinee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 9:07 pm
Interesting take on dichotomy. I really like the nice rhythm. It's not clunky or anything. :)
 
savetheplanet replied...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 9:09 pm
ROFLZ I don't think I've ever heard a poem described as clunky before.  I'm glad mine isn't.
 
Destinee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 9:10 pm
Aw, come on, some are. You know those awkward rhymes? 
 
savetheplanet replied...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 9:13 pm
Hmmm true, that's happened to me before.  It's really annoying especially if you don't know how to get rid of it.
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 10:53 am
Lovely last stanza. Sometimes I wish that I could just melt into the earth, become one with it's consciousness. Your last stanza nearly almost evokes that.
 
savetheplanet replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 4:14 pm
Thanks and yes, I feel like that too.  Wish I could sing myself into a tree and be part of the forest.
 
Aderes18 said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 1:01 pm

This is how I feel about the night!

Nice job! It's written very well, keep it up! :)

 
savetheplanet replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 4:16 pm
You guys are so sweet, with all the comments about how great my poem is.  Thanks! :D
 
Tiwaz said...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 9:34 pm
It's pretty! You did a good job giving it feeling. Great imagery, too. 
 
savetheplanet replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 4:15 pm
Thank you!  I like imagery the best.
 
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