Where Dandelions Roar MAG

June 10, 2011
By ApproachingNirvana GOLD, Burlington, Kansas
ApproachingNirvana GOLD, Burlington, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"May you be in heaven a full half hour before the devil knows you're dead." - Irish Drinking Toast


Virginia, stop sinking –
take those rocks from your pockets
and step away from the river.
Let's catch a ride, you and I,
to the place where dandelions roar;
where the alley-cat boys
use their cherry-red lighters
to ignite the stars,
inspired by fireflies
brighter than the sun.

What's your rush, Virginia?
Heaven may be nice
but it may not be there at all
and death is on its way
but Virginia, I'm here now,
and I'll give you some deliverance
à la I-75,
no Sunday dress required.

Think about it, Virginia:
you could drown in your sorrows, or
take a dip in the honey pot with me
but either way, Virginia,
promise me

you'll keep trying to swim.


The author's comments:
Suicide sucks.

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Igorasaur said...
on Sep. 23 2011 at 9:21 pm
This poem really touched my heart. I lost someone very close to me to me and she took her own life.. This poem by far is one of the best I've read. I know if she was still here she would have loved it just as much as I do. Amazing poem, please don't stop writing them.

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:53 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

oops meant word of course, sorry for misspellings.

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:51 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

If I could relate to this poem anymore than I already do, I might as well have written it. Beautiful poem, very vivid worch choice and you dont drown the base of your poem in that. I pray for your friend there. 5/5 and a favorite for sure.

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:35 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Wow, this is really great! :)

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:08 pm
zliddellz SILVER, Zeeland, Michigan
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Wow, I can't even express how much I like this poem!! Great job :)

on Aug. 3 2011 at 7:16 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

the first stanza is definately my favorite by far. and i love how you say heaven may be nice but it may not be there at all. I believe 99.9% that there is a heaven for me, for us, but there is always a doubt. It is sooo hard not to be a Doubting Thomas! I relate to this poem. Not me personally, but I've known others who suffer from depressive thoughts, etc. i would love it if you could read my work! This is truly great. i would love to hear your opinion of some of mine. <3

on Aug. 3 2011 at 3:25 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

This is very good. :) I like how you used colloquial language but also poetic metaphors and similes. Check out some of my work? :)

on Aug. 3 2011 at 10:35 am
JessicaShari SILVER, Auburn Hills, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
{L O V E} Why is everyone trying to find it? Maybe it's hidden for a reason...

I love this, especially the first paragraph. good job =)

Squeaks BRONZE said...
on Aug. 3 2011 at 10:23 am
Squeaks BRONZE, Glen Allen, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Some people just don't know when to quit." --from the back of my XC team's 200 summer mile club T-shirt

This is really good. Ditto with HollyBell :) Thanks for posting!

--Squeaks


on Aug. 3 2011 at 8:48 am
AllysonMarie GOLD, Gardner, Massachusetts
12 articles 25 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Only an Aunt can give hugs like a mother, can keep secrets like a sister, and share love like a friend.”

I loved it. I love how you made the reader wonder and think about what exactly the poem was about. Great Job!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 7:26 pm
HollyBell BRONZE, Orpington, Kent, Other
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This is so good! I especially love the first paragraph, very creative and imaginative. This should definately be printed in the magasine! If it isn't I'll be really disapointted because I've seen a lot of poems in there that aren't half as good as this. There is a lot of meaning in this and it's very powerful. Great Job.

Please check out mine? :)



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