Alone

July 16, 2011
By paige14 GOLD, Portsmouth, Ohio
paige14 GOLD, Portsmouth, Ohio
17 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Say what you need to say--John Mayer


My life in slow motion
Like swimming through syrup
Life all around
It's full speed ahead
The sound dulls to a roar
Echoes in my ear
When I walk
They separate
Not with awe nor fear
But as if a ghost walked the halls
I seem far off
A veil surrounds me
A bubble made real
Nothing else seems so
The mass of faces
Naught but a dream
So now it's just me
Alone


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on Nov. 25 2012 at 11:53 am
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

I love this poem ! Beautifully done! This is really well written and has a lot of metaphors throughout the entire piece. You're a great writer!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 2:27 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

beautiful, I love the ending "now it's just me, alone" though the "nothing else seems so" line was kind of cut short... I don't quite get that part. still, 5/5

on Jan. 12 2012 at 3:37 am
Pen2Paper BRONZE, Eatons Hill, Other
3 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
This was said by Abraham Lincoln: It is better to remain silent and be thought a fool than to speak out and remove all doubt.

I loved it, it summed up lonliness perfectly, in an intriguing sort of way. A really amazing poem.

on Oct. 10 2011 at 3:35 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This perfectly describes loneliness!  I love the imagery in this piece as well.  Excellent work!  5/5 stars.

on Oct. 9 2011 at 5:41 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Great free verse poem.

5/5


paige14 GOLD said...
on Sep. 29 2011 at 10:49 pm
paige14 GOLD, Portsmouth, Ohio
17 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Say what you need to say--John Mayer

Thank you! And I'm technically from Burg (don't hold that against me...) where do you go to school?

LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Sep. 29 2011 at 8:24 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

This Is Very good btw My Home Town Is Portsmouth, ohio:)

on Sep. 28 2011 at 6:48 pm
I liked this poem. I was reminded of the sound of a distant train whistle as you walked all alone on a deserted road....in other words, you get a 4/5 for this. I can't wait to read your other works!

msp49 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 30 2011 at 12:35 pm
msp49 BRONZE, Middletown, Connecticut
4 articles 1 photo 39 comments
I liked the way this poem flowed from word to word. You didn't try to make anything rhyme and it sounded natural. Good job!

on Aug. 17 2011 at 3:33 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
40 articles 1 photo 773 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

wow!! that was really good! emtional! but very good!!! Great work!!!! Keep writing!!! :)(:


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