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Army Miracles
July 12, 2011
For most
When they look up at the sun,
It beams
And shines onto their faces
As light slips into the
Tiniest nooks
And crevices.
It takes its time until it
Finally
Slithers into their closed eyes
And turns their
Whole
World
Orange
But when I look up at the sun
I can’t help but
Look
The other
Way
And hope to see the soft silhouette
Of the faded but
Prominent,
Gray moon
Struggling to outshine the sun
When the sky is blue
And not tainted with
Darkness
At times when I do catch that
Effervescent moon
I know my father is in his army tent
Looking up at it too
Thinking that oddities
Can truly happen
But I know
What he really wishes
When he sees that
Silvery
Moon.
He longs
To come home,
Watch it with his daughter,
Laugh alongside her,
And say in unison
That miracles really do
Come along
© Candace R., Mt. Pleasant, SC
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This article has 36 comments.
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on Jan. 24 2014 at 7:27 pm
Hey there, This is an amazing poem, though my father is not in the army, I have a frend who graduated two years ago, who is in the army. I miss him everyday, I have yet to write him again though I have only wroten him only a few time. I understand what your going through or went through. I love this a lot.
LadyJaneGrey PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 25 2011 at 10:00 pm
This was awesome. My dad was in the military, and I think you captured the emotions really well.
SecretFlame PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 10:57 pm
This is great, with wonderful description and a wonderful message! Amazing piece! You really struck home with me!
Hazel-daisy GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 3:44 pm
this is so good, i really like it, its so emotional and moving, i'm sure your mom is very proud of this piece! good work! 5/5
white_chocolate97 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 2:17 pm
This was amazing!! I really liked the emotions you put into it and your word choice. Great work!!
WritingSpasms said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 8:33 pm
I really do like all the emotion you put into this. It's beautifully written and you were very descriptive. Keep it up :)
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 7:45 pm
Very beautiful and very simple poem! I love the emotions and the rhythm of it. Excellent work! :)
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 2:22 pm
this is extremely powerful. and i love the word effervescent :) i also liked the rhythm. it was different and really cool to read. did you ever think about putting it to music?
youaretheinkandlifeisthepaper BRONZE said...
on Jul. 18 2011 at 5:51 pm
Wow this is really powerful and beautifully written. Love the simplicity, it really makes you think.
vzimmerman PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:42 pm
Taking about a family with a loved one in the army is great because so many people can relate to it. It really hits the heart. Great Job! Keep Writing:)
TheSilverLaurel GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 3:38 pm
this is really emotional, and has a very deep meaning. Keep up the great work
YesThatsWhyTheyFly SILVER said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 2:42 pm
I really liked this poem. very good vocabulary!
poetry<3 said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 8:20 pm
nice feel annd flow to the poem. most importantly like the moral behind it :)
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:29 pm
Love the description and message of the poem, very nice! I really liked you rhyming faces with crevices, I thought that was great and really creative!
I also loved how the story changed from a kind of happy feel about the sun to something serious, great tone change there as well.
I also loved how the story changed from a kind of happy feel about the sun to something serious, great tone change there as well.
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 9:29 am
Really like this, alot! i have alot of people in my family that have served and still are its very touching :)
