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The sun streams in through
a dusty paned window.
He sits at a scratched plastic table,
his fingers drumming a pattern like
a heartbeat, gradually slowing.
A hummingbird flits near the open window,
his wings buzzing softly as he floats, seemingly
motionless.
Sharp golden rays glint off
the bird's stained glass feathers,
warning lights burning into the man's eyes.
The drumming slows to a single thud,
then silence.
The hummingbird floats away,
his buzzing deafeaning in the muffled quiet.
A shrill ringing pierces through the fog.
A tear glistens on the man's cheek as he
answers the phone with a heavy heart
because he knows he will never see her again.



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Zildj This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 1:08 am
This is sad. And that makes it beautiful. You have a gift for the little things, like wings and butterpat suns that make up a whole world. Its great. 
 
ohmakemeover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 12:10 am
Another ambiguous piece with a heavy tone.  The imagery was really lovely in this one, especially with the humingbird's stained-glass wings.  You have such a knack for both honesty and prose- I'm jealous!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:28 am
Thank you very much! I appreciate the feedback :)
 
JustAnotherOwl said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 7:26 pm
I loved this! I love the way you write, poems and fiction. (: You are really very talented!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 3:49 pm
Well thank you! It's always nice to hear that!
 
Reader101 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:36 pm
I loved it! It's simple but it really pulls me in... I could imagine every line in my head as I read it. Keep writing! :)
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 3:49 pm
Thanks very much for reading and commenting :)
 
Reader101 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 2, 2011 at 12:10 am
No problem!:)
 
freeflow23 said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 3:18 pm
Amazing! You really help the reader feel the emotion portrayed. I even teared up a bit when the man cried. Love it!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:08 pm
Thank you! :)
 
JoPepper said...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 11:51 am
Awww that is kinda' sad!  Very good job!!!
 
Bill M. replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 2:50 pm
Definitely a tense poem.  You had me reading closely the whole time, imagining everything.  Gripping work, once again rita.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:07 pm
Thanks very much!
 
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