Surrendering to the Sea

May 4, 2011
By Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee


Caught up in a wave of bliss,
Then pulled under by pain.
A tsunami of longing
A hurricane of doubt
The dark waves are raging.

The current: too good to be true.
Smooth sailing ahead-
You and me on the beach,
Our love flowing and ebbing with the tide.

Suddenly
The water becomes rough,
Violent and uncontrollable.
I try to grip your hand
Yet you drop mine
Like an ugly, broken shell
And I am ripped away
I drift out to sea.

I am cradled by the waves,
The surf rocks me back and forth,
Comforting me
Though the water damage just caused
Is irreparable.

I turn my back
On that once beautiful beach
And surrender to the sea.


The author's comments:
This is about a perfect relationship that was a lie.

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on Jun. 27 2011 at 8:59 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks! Imagery is my favorite :)

on Jun. 26 2011 at 7:00 pm
HaleyDRog. GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
11 articles 14 photos 291 comments

Favorite Quote:
In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life. It goes on. -Robert Frost

I really love this. You had amazing imagery!

on Jun. 25 2011 at 11:18 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Haha okay :)

on Jun. 25 2011 at 11:14 pm
Ambershort PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Maryland
22 articles 4 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't compromise yourself, it's all you've got." - Janis Joplin

I haven't posted it yet! I just got a new computer and I still have to transfer allmy work to this one. It will be up soon though!

on Jun. 25 2011 at 11:13 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I'd love to check it out, whats it called?

on Jun. 25 2011 at 11:12 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thank you :) I'm glad you can relate!

on Jun. 25 2011 at 11:10 pm
Ambershort PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Maryland
22 articles 4 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't compromise yourself, it's all you've got." - Janis Joplin

This was amazing! I have a poem that's very similiar to this in which I also give myself to the waves. Keep writing!

on Jun. 20 2011 at 11:25 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thank you :) The last stanza is the first one I wrote, I just added to it to create a stronger image :D

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2011 at 10:52 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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The imagery is just indescriably good, I can feel and see your vision clearly. Love the last stanza, it's my favorite

on Jun. 20 2011 at 9:33 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Haha yay! Thanks a million!! :D

on Jun. 19 2011 at 9:53 pm
WishfulDoer GOLD, Portland, Oregon
14 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
If ignorance is bliss, why is our country so complicated?

I can't even tell you how much I can relate to this. You're kiiind of amazing. (: KEEP WRITING FOR POOP'S SAKE

on Jun. 14 2011 at 2:53 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

Yea I totally understand

on Jun. 14 2011 at 9:37 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thank you so much dear :) I know it will, eventually even though it seems like I won't find anyone. Well its not even that really, I just am tired of being with guys and putting so much into it to get nothing back :P Oh well. haha

on Jun. 13 2011 at 2:37 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

"Cradled by the sea" I love that it stood out! And your endings always give me goosebumps because they're always so good and just so you know you're really a beautiful shell and one day when the right person finds you, he'll treasure you and never let your hand go. You'll find him and it won't be a lie. Promise! <x3 cross my heart

on Jun. 13 2011 at 1:50 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

It sucks, huh? Thank you :)

on Jun. 13 2011 at 12:47 pm
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."

this is very powerful i can relate to this because alot of my relationships have been like this awsome pieace of work and your good looking.




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