I Hate Your Laugh MAG

April 5, 2011
By HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."


I hate your eyes.
But it's not that murky excuse for green that I hate
It's their ability to stare in mine
Hold them so intensely
And pour Grade A lies so fluidly

I hate your laugh.
Like a teacher's sturdy nails against the blackboard
With a hint of base of course
To make up for the basics that define you as a man.
Maybe.

I hate your hair.
The eight-dollar bottle of that pharmacy chestnut brown
That now traps your natural beach blonde locks
I believe your haircut has been long overdue
But that would mean chopping off your wannabe Bieber shag.

I hate your teeth.
Who knew behind those pearly whites
Festered so much rage
When you would clench them together
Throwing one of your first-class hissy fits.

What [I] hate the most about you?
I don't even know
If you would be ab[L]e to comprehend the truth
That I'm about to sh[O]ot through your veins
If it could e[V]en sink through that thick skull
Lay[E]red with your various comics
And your classic John Ma[Y]er CD's
Y[O]u wo[U]ldn't even be able to grasp it.

So the question still stands.
I can't exactly put my finger on it.
But.

I'm pretty sure I just hate you.


The author's comments:
What can I say? I guess I just hate it all.

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artlove919 said...
on Jun. 16 2015 at 1:29 pm
It made me laugh to know this was directed to a man. yet in your poem you describe his tantrums, first class hissy fits. quote from your poem; "Throwing one of your first-class hissy fits."

on Sep. 7 2012 at 7:09 am
Emma-Riley PLATINUM, No, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Take my hand i give it to you, now you own me all i am, you said you would never leave me, i believe you, i believe..."
-Flyleaf

i love this poem! i could practically see the person you were describing, and i love being "in" the writing that i read! AMAZING  

on Aug. 24 2011 at 8:46 pm
marissa87 BRONZE, Glenmoore, Pennsylvania
4 articles 3 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
what is popular is not always right and what is right is not always popular

ur welcome keep writting!!1

 


on Aug. 14 2011 at 10:05 pm
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P

o man i love this one! it's so cute!

on Aug. 11 2011 at 4:14 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Aha thanks! :)

on Aug. 11 2011 at 3:56 pm
little-miss-mistakes GOLD, Plano, Texas
18 articles 2 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
even after all these years the sun has never said to the earth, you owe me... look at what a love like that can do, it can light up the sky

i love this!!! true and honest and just plain mad! keep it up!!

on Aug. 10 2011 at 7:27 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

me neither! Don't really like country music in general... lol

on Aug. 10 2011 at 7:26 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Thanks! And I had no idea Taylor Swift did that actually... I'm really not a fan of her. lol

on Aug. 10 2011 at 7:19 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

oh and i agree with brightburningcampeador. maybe make the message longer and spread out the letters throughout. Or in the very last line, make it so that it is saying i hate you but the capitalized letters say i love you in the same sentence! but obviously you will have to add more than just i hate you so that it would work. just another idea!

on Aug. 10 2011 at 7:16 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

this was very cool. You know the taylor swift cds where they capitalize the letters spelling out things? just wondering if that is where you got this idea. I like the letter thing and how there is a hidden message in what you are saying! Next time i would recommend you leave out the brackets and just capitalize. it would make it less distracting, but it would still be noticeable! great job on this. Sweet!

on Aug. 10 2011 at 5:54 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Thats actually a really awesome suggestion! Never thought of that! Thanks! :)

on Aug. 10 2011 at 5:50 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Awesome poem! I have on suggestion. Maybe you couyld scatter the bracketed letters throughout the poem, like one every verse.

on Aug. 10 2011 at 12:48 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

I appreciate your honesty! And thank you! :)

on Aug. 10 2011 at 12:46 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
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I love this! The beginning was so good, and I'm going to be honest, the brackets kind of ruined the flow for me, but otherwise I really loved it.

on Aug. 9 2011 at 10:31 am
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

No problem :)

on Aug. 8 2011 at 10:14 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Thank you! I appreciate it!

on Aug. 8 2011 at 10:14 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Thanks so much!

on Aug. 8 2011 at 10:13 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Thank you... means a lot. :)

on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:54 pm
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

Love, love, love this. Cute, quirky and very unique. The "I Love You" was brilliant. :)

on Aug. 6 2011 at 12:50 pm
marissa87 BRONZE, Glenmoore, Pennsylvania
4 articles 3 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
what is popular is not always right and what is right is not always popular

u r such a good writer! wow!! love it!




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