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Life is...
getting lost
and asking for directions
crying
about losses and gains
yelling
For anger, excitment, and joy
sitting and watching
time melt for you and your love.
meeting
new people
letting go
of love.
having
your soul touched.
painting a sunset
multiple times in differnet ways
Late
nights with best friends.
learning
how to make the best possible.





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JustAnotherOwl said...
May 30, 2011 at 8:39 am
I don't really have any complaints! Very nice! I just really love your style, I think! (:
 
KyleG This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 29, 2011 at 9:14 am
i liked the "painting a sunset, multiple times in different ways." It's a unique description, and it brought a specific image to the poem. Try adding more things like that. Instead of "nights with best friends," give a brief but poignant description of a particular night that stands out in your mind. If you can capture why it stands out in your mind, it will jump off the page and into the reader's imagination. 
 
baller4eva This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 31, 2011 at 11:33 am

Life is...
getting lost
and asking for directions
crying
about losses and gains
yelling
For anger, excitment, and joy
sitting and watching
time melt for you and your love.
meeting
new people
letting go
of love.
having
your soul touched.
painting a sunset
multiple times in differnet ways
Late
nights with best friends
and spicy peppers.    

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how to make the ... (more »)

 
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