Needle Stage

March 13, 2011
By Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.


The crowds went wild when you fell apart.
And I cried to see just how many people
From all nations came to see the performance.
The playwright was truly delighted at
Just how fast the tickets sold out.
The actors encouraged the audience
To litter the stage with band aids
All as a part of some sick joke.
They had all your bruises labeled
With expensive price tags to display
In front of an expecting audience.
I bet they’ll sale your broken limbs
for thousands on the black market.
They would probably lynch the janitor
If he tried to stitch you back together.
Which explains why he wept so hard
As he silently carried you off the stage.


The author's comments:
I was writing this in drama class when I should've been taking notes. I meant to write needle and thread but the teachers words were scrambled in my head so I accidentally wrote needle and stage. I can imagine a crowd watching some actor get "did" and the janitor's too afraid to help the gut out so he just sobs really hard as he drags his body off the stage. Please commentate.

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on Jun. 24 2014 at 5:27 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Haha! Thsnks!! I just love it.

on Jun. 24 2014 at 5:27 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

Thank you! Had I known this comment was here I wouldve responded sooner. Pardon please me.

on Jun. 23 2014 at 3:42 am
Miss_Orange SILVER, Makati, Other
6 articles 0 photos 113 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm OK, I'm Fine and I'm alright are the greatest lies people tell each other everyday." By Me.

I love this! one problem though, how come I can only put 5 stars?

on Mar. 18 2013 at 11:56 pm
DarkBlueBaby BRONZE, Chestnut Ridge, New York
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Why fit in when you were born to stand out?" ~ Dr. Seuss
"Never let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."

Disturbing in a weirdly intriguing way. I love it, haha, what a shock. I'm a big fan of your work  :) ne m'en voudrez pas, I'm just gonna become more inspired by reading more of your pieces. Awesome job Boos!

on Jul. 28 2011 at 7:31 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

well then maybe you shouldnt relate. nobodys trying to kill you. i might be held responsible. run captain.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 4:15 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Well, I tend to relate to all writing pieces on an emotional level. 

on Jul. 28 2011 at 1:13 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

oh, i know,maybe youre reading too hard.

on Jul. 28 2011 at 1:12 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

whatever you like merci captain.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 9:36 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

It's a great poem but very sad and disturbing. It's not my thing. :(

on Jul. 17 2011 at 9:24 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

uh.....no.though i am still owing you, my dear Raven.

on Jul. 16 2011 at 1:04 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Ah, by no means am I condemning you. The wrong time is really the right time, may I remind you, so there is not need to face death of any kind at the present moment. Unless you would like to give your life to the passion of your pen.

on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:03 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

ohh!!! it is that your comment is most awesomeful. the right thing at the wrong time? sounds poetic yet slightly condeming. do i dare face such a suttle death? merci for your commentation capatation.

on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:01 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

uh....something along the lines of thanks. i guess.

on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:22 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Oh my, the horror of the monster theatre and its "sick joke." It rather reminds me of my fear of the circus. You're always doing the right things at the wrong time (which is really the right time), and the result is these beautiful broken narratives. I like that the poor old janitor (bless his heart) is sobbing in desperation as he cleans up the mess. There's always a kindly character backstage.

Masterful job, Boosflash.


on Jun. 22 2011 at 11:31 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

do you mean the literal picture? cause i thought it was awesome but it took forever to find. thanks ofr commentating. the feedbackam tells me im doing something right.merci.

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jun. 21 2011 at 11:20 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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uGhhhh I am so jealous of the way you capture a truely magnificant picture <3 This is wild and absurd and fantastic.

on Jun. 16 2011 at 6:29 pm
trapped-in-a-broken-wonderland PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
30 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
love in it'a essence is just spiritual fire

well see... that can be interperated so many different ways... what is the way it's ment to be interperated?

on Jun. 15 2011 at 1:38 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

ding! merci tres beacoup captain. your inputism is awesome.

on Jun. 8 2011 at 11:40 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Oh wow. This is gorgeous and beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time. I do believe I might shatter, reminiscent of the actor's demise. Like a lone gladiator, maybe, nothing fighting him but himself and the crowd.

That sounds like a beautiful and disgusting performance art piece.


on May. 17 2011 at 5:19 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
54 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

you really do me in captain. merci tres beacoup.


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