The Rain Dancer

February 19, 2011
I dance in your cool embrace
I tip back my head to feel your touch
The ground is slick
With your discarded flesh
Others would slip
But I know you well
Such tricks do not work on me
Unless I want them to

Soon your bright brother
Will drive you away
And claim me
Until then, though
We continue to dance





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leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 14, 2011 at 7:00 pm
Lol I also read this one earlier too :D. I really like the double meanings on this, you're such an amazing writer. 5/5
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Sept. 2, 2011 at 6:11 pm
Whoa, it took me a bit to figure out that you were speaking of the rain, strangely enough. I think that's good :)
 
JoPepper said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 4:27 pm
I really like how you compared rain to a person!!!!! Very good!!!! :))
 
thefamoustapper replied...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 4:39 pm
I agree! and i have to say i love the picture of the girl in an arabesque! i'm a dancer so i just have to say that! as always, keep writing!
 
ohheyyyelli said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 1:18 pm
You are such an amazing writer, I'm jealous.
 
OceanFey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 2:34 pm
This poem feels so real. :) You conveyed the emotions really well.
 
lucybrown97 said...
Apr. 16, 2011 at 4:33 pm

This is a pretty poem- I like the metaphor you used-'the ground is slick with your discarded flesh' I'd never thought about rain that way before. 

Keep it up, I loved this!

 
leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 7:28 pm
i liked this poem, keep up the good work!
 
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