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He, in the meadow
Calls and sings to the sparrow
Sparrow, short answer in reply
The grass around long ago had died
Plucked a blade, examine
Death, he exclaims, from famine
You see that tree
Points in sunlight gestures for me
Peaceful ground it sits on
Halo created from the light of dawn
Yes, I see, the shadow is wide
Casts darkness from side to side
The grass has searched
Long for the sun it breaths, it earns
A gentle tear just one
He tries to hide but sparkles with the sun
Why, I ask, do you cry
It just hurts but is fair how modest things die
Unlike the tree it does not sit
No attention or jealousy within this thing exists
It lives for a simple reason
To soften the ground in summer season
You walk upon it everyday
But how often do you hear yourself say
Why this grass looks most lovely today.



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Anagam said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 10:58 am:
your an amazing writer :) towards the ending i felt as though the poem was being whispered :D
 
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Delictious said...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 1:08 pm:
Loved your writing style here, it was very nice! 
 
Delictious replied...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 1:09 pm :

I liked how it had a very nice flow, it wasn't choppy like some poetry has been found to be. I also enjoyed the topic it was about, thought it was very creative. Keep writing, you're very good at it! :D

Sorry about the second comment... I pressed post comment before I was done:(

 
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Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 11:25 pm:
I love poetry about nature. I don't know why, and yours is really good. I love the way it's like a conversation--it leads to an interesting effect. Very good job.
 
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CarrieAnn13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 8:12 pm:
This was a beautiful poem with great imagery.  Just one criticism: "it breaths" should be "it breathes".
 
Megan.J.B replied...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 10:43 am :
Aw, yes. I see that now, thank you.:)
 
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musicispassion said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 1:33 pm:
good job i like it
 
Megan.J.B replied...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 8:02 pm :
Thank you! :)
 
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EmilyGram said...
Mar. 19, 2011 at 12:45 am:
Interesting reflection on nature and the hurt in life.  I like it!
 
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Medina D. said...
Feb. 24, 2011 at 8:07 pm:

this is a form of poetry I've never seen before. i cant believe I'm the only one who commented!! *pouts in frustration because this lovely poem needs a lovely audience cause it's just plain precious*

And i dont really know what to say after that. i guess the beauty of it knocked the words out of me

 
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