Express My Love

January 29, 2011
By msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it


How I express my love to you will never end I put my heart and trust But you don't seem to care I put my hands out to you you pull them away I express my love between you you dnt seem to care dont know why I put all this trust into you but then again you treat me like trash NO! I cant believe you I can be their for you but you don't care I care for you then again you treat me like a trash bag filled with trash knotted up and thrown away! WHY!My heart is in pain and its being detached


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on Mar. 19 2011 at 1:58 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

its okay its good to get fee back so you can improve that is not my best poem did u view my other ones

on Mar. 18 2011 at 4:02 pm
HipsterUnicorn. BRONZE, Pendleton, Oregon
3 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is the Movement."

Sorry, it's my opinion.

on Mar. 17 2011 at 9:10 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

I understand what you mean, sometimes i get so worked up over my poetry it all just comes out and it seams to match well enough for myself, yet it makes no sense to another. 

on Mar. 17 2011 at 7:19 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

thanks , for telling me but this not my best poem just saying my other ones are better

on Mar. 17 2011 at 4:14 pm
HipsterUnicorn. BRONZE, Pendleton, Oregon
3 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is the Movement."

No offense but maybe you could organize it better? It's super hard to follow.

on Mar. 16 2011 at 4:28 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

okay thankks for letting me kno did u read my other poems

on Mar. 15 2011 at 8:00 pm
Mz.Minny2011 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
My fav quote (4now)
When I met you my heart skipped a beat..... the sun became the moon & cold became heat.... Roses weren't red an violetes weren't blue.....And all because i fell IN LIKE WITH YOU <3

the poem was okay but i think u kud hav been more descriptive of your feelings

on Mar. 15 2011 at 6:00 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

............ did u read my other poem this wasnt my best poem tho

on Mar. 15 2011 at 5:58 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

thanks for letting me know . did u c my other poems commet them that is not my best poem I have more

on Mar. 15 2011 at 5:05 pm
silence-is-loud GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
10 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
FLOAT LIKE A BUTTERFLY, STING LIKE A BEE- MUHAMMID ALI

I agree with LiveInTheMoment... You used the wrong words and tense for a lot of the poem. This poem seemed childish and it seemed like you didn't give the poem any thought. However, besides from that I understand what you were saying.... Just organize your thoughts first, and then take a deep breath and type. :)

on Mar. 14 2011 at 4:40 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

I didn't love the poem. One of the lines I particularly didn't like was "you treat me like a trash bag full of trash." What else is a trash bag going to be filled with? Candy? It felt like a 4th grade poem, written right the morning the assignment was due. Even so, I can see potential in you. Keep on writing!

on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:05 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

its not anonymous its by maribel dejesus

on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:05 pm
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

maribel dejesus poem


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