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Proofread

I take the paper in my hands
Three pages thick, how does it end?
He skips a comma, I realize
I read a metaphor that makes me cry

'I am a doll, long forgotten' he writes
I wonder what he lives through at night
Do his parents know he feels this way?
Do his parents care what children say?

Tears drip down my pale face
For I know with what I am graced
I wish I knew to whom this belongs
I wish I could easily right these wrongs

Terrible pain, the similes tell
Screams from his kitchen, ring like a bell
I feel the pain, as it is mine too
I see it in the pictures the boy drew

Then I choke at the last paragraph
'Please help me now, for I am trapped
My parents have forgotten to care
Oh how is this fair?'

I found out the other day
The boy was killed as he prayed
His parents are imprisoned for neglect
But I should have helped, 'tis my regret.



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Raytheraym said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 4:52 pm:
Wow, this is...amazing! I seriourly got goosebumbs! :) Very well written!
 
Raytheraym replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 4:53 pm :

*seriously

I hate typos...

 
WiseGirl replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 7:14 pm :
Thank you!
 
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Iamhere4uThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 9:52 am:
This article is amazing. It ecourages me to become a social worker. very deep. Things like this cross my mind all the time. That why I want to do social work
 
WiseGirl replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 10:55 am :
Thanks so much! That's an awesome goal to have!
 
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Bookworm said...
Jun. 21, 2011 at 8:12 pm:

Such a sad poem, but so powerful!!! Keep up the amazing work!!!

You should read a novel called "13 Reasons Why". Your poem reminds me of it!!

 
WiseGirl replied...
Jun. 21, 2011 at 8:31 pm :
Thanks so much!
 
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CarrieAnn13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 6:34 pm:
Wow, this was a great poem.  I love the rhythm and the imagery is excellent as well.  Good job, WiseGirl!
 
WiseGirl replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 8:34 pm :
Thank you!
 
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NavishJaved said...
May 20, 2011 at 6:24 pm:

Wow! This was definitely very emotional and deep. :)

 

I may have missed the point, because I'm not too good with poems, but what does the title have to do with the poem? Is the main character proofreading the work? Why is the main character upset? What is the main character regretting?

 

I'm sorry, maybe you would like to clarify?

 

Overall, good job! :)

 
WiseGirl replied...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 10:03 am :

Wow, I just now saw this comment. Truthfully, when I started writing the poem, the main character was going to proofread the paper, but it got changed somewhere in my mind. I guess I never thought to change the title... oops....

Thanks though! :)

 
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