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You don't know me

I am more
than meets the eye
My low hung head
and gentle sigh

I think more
than I speak
I use my words
when I am weak

I hold on
to who I am
what you see;
an auspicious scam

You say you are
stronger than I
My low hung head
and gentle sigh

But you know not
just who I am
for what you see;
an auspicious scam

I try to show
what you cant see
the inner part
and all
of me,

I'll prove to the world
I'll show them
I'll try;
That I am more
than meets the eye




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Lizette said...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 12:04 pm:
I love when u said when u were weak u used words! Im not sure people really appriciqt the power of silence. Great job!!
 
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XxLauraHatakeXx said...
Dec. 15, 2010 at 3:24 pm:
your comments really really mean alot to me. i feel one step closer in the right direction:)
 
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bbyfi said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 10:20 pm:

i loved your poem. i can relate to it. my favorite part was:

"I hold on
to who I am
what you see;
an auspicious scam"

 
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Lizette said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 8:45 pm:
 i loved how it was simple, still ryhmed and yet you managed to pass along a deep meaning!!!
 
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htrae22 said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 6:43 pm:
sweet definitly gets the point across
 
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shekkles said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 3:19 pm:
i love this poem !
 
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ashley14 said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 10:50 am:
i love love loveeee this
 
kab503 replied...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 12:40 pm :
This poem is just fantastic. I like the rhyme usage and the repetition of "I am more that meets the eye." My favorite lines are lines 26-28 when you say"I'll prove to the world, I'll show them, I'll try" because you want the world to remember your name. You could make this poem better by describing yourself more.
 
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