Pale Blue Satin

November 12, 2010
By RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L'Engle


The roar of the Interstate not far away
The great black velvet sky overhead
The bright lights along the street's edge
And a girl dancing alone in the parking lot
Of an old deserted motel.
She's been here every night all summer
And nobody knows who she is
Though she dances till midnight every evening
In the deserted parking lot of that deserted building
In this desolate place.
The music she dances to nobody hears.
The crowd that she dances for nobody sees.
But every night this summer
at eight pm in the parking lot of that old deserted motel,
you can spot a blur of blue
(pale blue)
spinning like a top.
A joyous top.
The old women of this desolate town
Whisper about her under their breath,
Wondering
Who is she? What is she doing? Why is she here, of all places?
and other general things that are none of their business.
People are so narrowminded,
and they think the poor girl must be insane,
but I see nothing wrong
with dancing alone in the parking lot
of an old deserted motel.
And for a backdrop
The roar of the Interstate not far away
The great black velvet sky overhead
And the bright lights along the street's edge.

The author's comments:
One of my favorite poems out of all those I have written.

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Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 4:07 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

This is really pretty and it tells a story as well, which is great. Do you think you could check out my poem Sowing Poppies sometime? I'd love to hear your opinion.

on Feb. 14 2011 at 9:43 am
NonsensicalMuse PLATINUM, San Anotnio, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"There is nothing wrong with having your head in the clouds as long as you don't get altitude sickness"

"Perhaps you are right,perhaps not. I don't know 110% either way.All I know is that Im in search of truth. If you are too, let us be friends."

Beautiful and expressive!!

It would make a wonderful song!


on Feb. 7 2011 at 6:54 pm
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
109 articles 0 photos 165 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L'Engle

Thanks for reading, RiverSong. I'm so glad you liked it.

on Feb. 7 2011 at 2:15 pm
RiverSong BRONZE, Baltimore, Maryland
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Yeah, I found this by reccommendation (recommendation? reccomendation? I can never spell that word) from teenpoet8 on the forum, and I am awestruck. *five stars*

on Feb. 6 2011 at 1:24 pm
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
109 articles 0 photos 165 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L'Engle

Thanks a lot, Evil Laugh. It does sort of seem like a song, now that I think about it. :)

on Feb. 6 2011 at 12:32 pm
Origami_Ferret SILVER, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Let's go."
"We can't."
"Why not?"
"We're waiting for Godot."
--------------------------------
"Get thee to a nunnery!"

Wow, I read this at teenpoet8's recommendation, and I love the idea. I feel like it could have worked well as a song, too, maybe. Like Elizabeth_Day, I think this has some great imagery and such :D Well done.

on Feb. 5 2011 at 7:34 pm
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
109 articles 0 photos 165 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L'Engle

Thanks Brooke! I'm flattered, and I'm so glad you liked it. :)

teenpoet8 said...
on Feb. 5 2011 at 7:13 pm
hey this is Brooke!  thanks for checking out my poem, "Oxygen", and commenting.  This poem is beautiful!  maybe my favorite one I've read!  this is going right into my favorites!!!

on Jan. 30 2011 at 9:15 pm
Elizabeth_Day SILVER, Battle Ground, Washington
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I'd love that!  Thanks!

on Jan. 30 2011 at 5:10 pm
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
109 articles 0 photos 165 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L'Engle

Why thank you! I guess you figured out how to view people's work... thanks for picking me! I'm glad you liked it! I'll check out some of yours if you'd like; just say the word.

on Jan. 30 2011 at 4:37 pm
Elizabeth_Day SILVER, Battle Ground, Washington
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I really like this.  i can see the girl spinning on the black top with her pale blue dress (I know you didn't specify the dress, but it's what i see) belling out beneath her.  I feel like some of the lines should be broken up differently, but you did fantastic!


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