Trapped By The Room

November 8, 2010
By Tatyana DIAMOND, Colorado, Colorado
Tatyana DIAMOND, Colorado, Colorado
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The room

The screams

The spinning

The memories

The crying

It holds me

Im trapped by a room thats suppose to be empty



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on Nov. 24 2010 at 2:14 am
Tatyana DIAMOND, Colorado, Colorado
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thanks 

AnonyMiss GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 11:32 pm
AnonyMiss GOLD, Houston, Texas
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I really like all of the emotion that this poem evokes. and the last line has such a nice rythm...good job!

on Nov. 23 2010 at 9:52 pm
Tatyana DIAMOND, Colorado, Colorado
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i understand thanks 4 ur comment

on Nov. 23 2010 at 8:08 pm
SKSK1214 BRONZE, Davie, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"And suddenly we see that love costs all we have and will ever be. Yet its only love which sets us free.", & "If we don't believe theres reason for living then we'll never know."

It lacks a bit of structure and body, but i do see what your going for. It has potential, you just have to tweak it a little. Good start though.

on Nov. 23 2010 at 7:57 pm
Tatyana DIAMOND, Colorado, Colorado
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