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Her love is so beautiful
It drenches me in
vanilla twilight
its like a nightmare
cause i care for her
she is the apple of my eye
she is a angel that glistens
when she laughs
when she is near its like heavy
drops of atmosphere falling
her voice is a lovely tune
in my head
her love is in the eye of
her beholder
she is sweet and
delicate as a flower
she stops the pain
in the blink of an eye
her love is as strong
as an ox
she is as beautiful as
a falling angel
she is as good as a female fox
her smell lingers on me like flowers
her body is as slim and
curvy as a guitar
her tattoo on her chest protects her from her heart getting broken like an iron fist



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jamesacolson said...
Mar. 7, 2011 at 12:15 pm:
send me some of your work please
 
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alanacarlene said...
Oct. 26, 2010 at 6:21 pm:
Awww this is beautiful and very sweet! The last line is my favorite definately and I agree that you could improve on "as good as a female fox" and "strong as an ox" other than that i loved it
 
jamesacolson replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 10:47 am :
thanks for comments from you
 
alanacarlene replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 4:49 pm :
No problemo!!!! If get a chance would you mind checking out some of my work? Thanks!!! :)
 
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inspir3dThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 26, 2010 at 2:12 pm:
this is really sweet and the thought behind it is good, but there's some things that could be improved. For instance, "as good as a female fox"...doesn't really make sense. Also, were you listening to Vanilla Twilight by Owl City as you were writing this? i could tell.
 
jamesacolson replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 10:48 am :
thanks for comments from you
 
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spirit_bound said...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 7:55 pm:

i like it alot, i could really feel the emotion as i read this, keep writo=ing, your very talented

 

 
jamesacolson replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 10:48 am :
thanks for comments from you
 
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Inspiration_James said...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 1:37 pm:
This is good and I love really the last line,,.
 
jamesacolson replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 10:48 am :
thanks for comments from you
 
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