Malfunctioning

September 30, 2010
By Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee


There's a knot in my throat
A leak from my eye
A hole in my heart
No light in the sky.

There's a clench in my jaw
A fist in each hand
A stop in my pulse
And no one to understand.

There's a weakness in my knees
A strength in my pain
A need in my anger
But nothing to gain.

There's defiance on my tongue
A curse on my lips
A snarl in my smile
As my sanity slips.

There's no regret in my heart
No remorse in my heart
Just the final image of the expression on your face
And the feeling of my soul being blown apart.


The author's comments:
Kinda dark, I know. But the truth is - regardless of how bright the day seems to be, shadows are everywhere and night always comes back.

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on Jun. 19 2011 at 7:41 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks! Hehe :P Ryming just takes practice practice practice! And a good thesaurus!

on Jun. 19 2011 at 7:24 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I like how you changed the rhyme pattern in the last verse, and I LOVE how you could actually write rhymes that make sense.

on Oct. 21 2010 at 3:34 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thank ya much :)

on Oct. 20 2010 at 11:18 pm
genesis27000 SILVER, Mexia, Texas
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Goodnesss!!! I lalalalalalalooove it! It captures the all the raw emotions that people are afraid to say aloud.. All those emotion, you easily placed them so perfectly into words and beautiful words at that.

on Oct. 18 2010 at 3:16 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

Even your comment about this poem has a poetic ring to it! It's amazing :)

on Oct. 18 2010 at 11:58 am
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.
Ralph Waldo Emerson
<3

Freakin Ah-mazing! I love it... it rings true in every strand of my being.... FANTASTIC!!!!! :>

on Oct. 18 2010 at 8:35 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Thanks Alana :) Your opinion means a lot to me :)

on Oct. 16 2010 at 4:11 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

Holy cow Alex!!! This is amazing!!! My favorite part was:

"There's defiance on my tongue
A curse on my lips
A snarl in my smile
As my sanity slips."

Very awesome nice flow and it kinda has a good beat too! Loved it :)



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