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Malfunctioning

There's a knot in my throat
A leak from my eye
A hole in my heart
No light in the sky.

There's a clench in my jaw
A fist in each hand
A stop in my pulse
And no one to understand.

There's a weakness in my knees
A strength in my pain
A need in my anger
But nothing to gain.

There's defiance on my tongue
A curse on my lips
A snarl in my smile
As my sanity slips.

There's no regret in my heart
No remorse in my heart
Just the final image of the expression on your face
And the feeling of my soul being blown apart.





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BrightBurningCampeador This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 19, 2011 at 7:24 pm
I like how you changed the rhyme pattern in the last verse, and I LOVE how you could actually write rhymes that make sense.
 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 19, 2011 at 7:41 pm
Thanks! Hehe :P Ryming just takes practice practice practice! And a good thesaurus!
 
genesis27000 said...
Oct. 20, 2010 at 11:18 pm
Goodnesss!!! I lalalalalalalooove it! It captures the all the raw emotions that people are afraid to say aloud.. All those emotion, you easily placed them so perfectly into words and beautiful words at that.
 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 21, 2010 at 3:34 pm
Thank ya much :)
 
ellyn-bo-bellyn said...
Oct. 18, 2010 at 11:58 am
Freakin Ah-mazing! I love it... it rings true in every strand of my being.... FANTASTIC!!!!! :>
 
alanacarlene said...
Oct. 16, 2010 at 4:11 pm

Holy cow Alex!!! This is amazing!!! My favorite part was:

"There's defiance on my tongue
A curse on my lips
A snarl in my smile
As my sanity slips."

Very awesome nice flow and it kinda has a good beat too! Loved it :)

 
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 18, 2010 at 8:35 am
Thanks Alana :) Your opinion means a lot to me :)
 
alanacarlene replied...
Oct. 18, 2010 at 3:16 pm
Even your comment about this poem has a poetic ring to it! It's amazing :)
 
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