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Ferociously, I poured it all on to you
I began to release it above your head
So it would sit and
On your shoulders.
The weight: a lifetime,
I didn’t even see your face scrunch up or your knees quiver.
I remember now the flames that danced around my cheeks as I added more to the pile,
Willing you to crack. Willing for that release of air that told me you were done.

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thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 11, 2010 at 6:03 pm

this is so good! you are such a great writer. this is one of my absolute favorites!

rate/comment on some of my work too if you'd like. great job. keep writing!

Lauu112 replied...
Oct. 12, 2010 at 1:18 pm
Thank youuu!  :)
through_my_eyes said...
Oct. 9, 2010 at 8:35 pm
i like this. Its really awesome :D and the last line was like POW!
Lauu112 replied...
Oct. 10, 2010 at 3:45 am
Thank you. That's so nice of you :)
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