Him. Just Him

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Him.
It’s more than a word really
But less than a thing
It’s a thought,
Lying somewhere between here and there
Between me and us
‘Cause it’s not us, but it’s not just me either
It’s him.

Him with his sea blue eyes
Or at least, I think they’re blue
Frothing like the tips of crashing waves
Yeah, that sounds about right.
After all, I’d have noticed if they were green.
Imagine that?
As green as mold?
But his are blue, I’m sure of it.

Him with his velvet smiles,
Enveloping me like a summer breeze
I feel so warm when he smiles
Does he smile?
He should.
Because, it’s part of being him
And of course,
Him with his beat-up, shaggy hair,
Or is it short like freshly-cut grass?
No, it’s definitely shaggy

And his muscles!
Those are simply divine
From all the football he plays, no doubt
I think I’ve seen him on the football team
Although he’s never scored a touchdown
But surely he’s on it.
And his muscles?
Those have to be hiding somewhere
He can’t just not have them.
Right?

So yeah…
That’s him.
From his blue-or-green eyes
To his shaggy-short hair
And his enigmatic smiles
With his maybe-there muscles
He’s perfect, without a doubt.
He has to be.
Is he?





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awesomeaugust This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 5:21 pm

This was interesting and cute- I really liked it! The only critisism I would have would be in the last stanze where you say "so yeah..." Why?? A conclusion is the strongest part! When I read it I was sad because everytihng else is so perfect! It's like it you had a really good presentation and then at the end you said "So yeah...that's my project"

Keep writing!!

 
juliam This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 7, 2010 at 7:04 pm

Thank you so much!

The reason I wrote 'so yeah' was to make the speaker sound like a confused person, exactly like the one you described. Here she is, presenting her 'project' but then she realizes that she's not at all sure of the subject. 

This sort of reflects my feelings of a boy that I met, and I started liking him before I really knew who he was. In the end, I realized I'd just created my perfect guy, and that I didn't know the real one at all. 

 
awesomeaugust This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 8, 2010 at 3:16 pm

Wow, that's cool that there was reason behind the "so yeah". To me it sounded like it was thrown in at the last second, but your explanation makes sense. Thanks and keep writing!

~sofia~

 
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